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An Inspiring Pile Of Shoes - Poem by s.zaynab kamoonpuri

I attended a large gathering and took some time
to observe the great assortment of shoes stacked on the racks
I saw new shoes, pricey shoes, and shoes not worth a dime
and shoes that seemed to have crossed many paths and tracks.

I saw dainty sandals and flighty high heeled ones too
I saw sporty sneakers and rough and tough trainers
I saw both the laced and the leathery buckled shoe
Then I saw the humble yet hardy pair of slippers.

I saw pointy shoes, furry shoes and flatties as well
I saw flowery ones and those studded with trinket gems
Some stacked neatly in pairs, others thrown about pell mell
Some recently repaired, some coming off at the hems.

I saw long boots, rubber boots and
there were glittery Indian styled stilettoes
I spotted fragile glass sandals and metallic brass sandals
and soft comfy ones for comfort of feet 'n' toes.

And while I was thus lost and engrossed
in watching the great assortment of shoes

The old caretaker, to me, a cheap pair tossed
saying, ' here's an extra pair if you've lost your shoes.

She was too busy and distracted to be in my shoes of muse
So I'd to slip out thinking of some quick excuse
She didn't even notice I wasn't barefoot
So I had to take them elsewhere, both my muse and my boot!

Ah and long ago when once we could afford only a 'shoestring' budget  
I once hadn't enough bucks to replace a worn out pair of shoes
I was sad for not having even a good goody two shoes
Then God showed me a wayfarer's shoeless pair of barefeet
and then one hapless one with no feet at all!
So I could imagine life being in their missing shoes.

See my 'footnote' AN nows.zaynab kamoonpuri

Poet's Notes about The Poem

Wonderin where I saw so many shoes off peoples feet? Well, in our religious gatherings say for prayers we've to enter the mosque hall barefoot and sit crosslegged. So that's where u come across all kinds of shoes on racks provided in the cubicle.

Actually in the Disney movie, 'THE PRINCE OF EGYPT', i marked that even Moses took off his shoes before talking to God.

Comments about An Inspiring Pile Of Shoes by s.zaynab kamoonpuri

  • (5/23/2014 12:59:00 AM)

    I love shoes of all sorts... but sadly I'm too old to wear stilletos now, (I loved your shoe shop) (Report) Reply

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  • Cynthia Buhain-baello (2/2/2014 2:53:00 AM)

    Interesting write and a revealing piece on culture and regard for shoes. (Report) Reply

  • Bri Edwards (1/20/2014 5:24:00 PM)

    DEAR S,

    i enjoyed the 'listing' of the shoes. then i was lost when you talked of a muse.

    Some stacked neatly in pairs, others thrown about pell mell I HAD TO check the definition of
    pell-mell [the online dictionary uses a hyphen] to see if it fit, and it definitely does, perfectly.

    Some recently repaired, some coming off at the hems. I'M NOT a shoemaker or tailor, but i would use stitching instead of hems here. i may be out-voted by the readers. that reminds me i have a shoe which is in serious need of repair before my toes start sticking out [it is not meant to be open-toed! ].

    And while I was thus lost and engrossed
    in watching the great assortment of shoes
    The old caretaker, to me, a cheap pair tossed
    saying, ' here's an extra pair if you've lost your shoes.

    thanks for sharing the poem AND the FOOTnote. now i know where to 'shop' for shoes.........a mosque! bri :)
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  • (1/15/2014 2:56:00 PM)

    This was funny though not a shoephile such as yourself I am amused by the subject, if the shoe fits just wear it. Thank you for given a description of this story, it was an interesting and well told tale. An amazing eye for detail (Report) Reply

  • Yasmin Khan (12/31/2013 11:28:00 AM)

    You have put your observation and thoughts nicely in verse form. (Report) Reply

  • (12/31/2013 4:18:00 AM)

    OSM WRITE.... GRT........................ (Report) Reply

  • Unwritten Soul (12/30/2013 6:39:00 AM)

    Oh this is wonderful, the meaning, the story and the thing behind of the write...a good poem to share with many for us to learn too_Soul (Report) Reply

  • (12/29/2013 5:07:00 AM)

    What a wonderful poem on shoes n the last line is a cherry on top. lovely. (Report) Reply

  • Tirupathi Chandrupatla (12/28/2013 11:05:00 PM)

    Most shoes are made of leather which is skin of animals. Shoes protect feet. Nice observations about shoes. Thank you. (Report) Reply

  • Anil Kumar Panda (12/28/2013 11:06:00 AM)

    beautiful drop.would like to read again and again. (Report) Reply

  • Sayeed Abubakar (12/26/2013 8:23:00 AM)

    Excellent writing. I like it very much. Well-rhymed. Were you aware of the rhythm of this poem? You are a brilliant poet, I have to confess. Did you read any poem of Shiekh Saadi regarding shoe? (Report) Reply

  • (12/25/2013 6:34:00 PM)

    very thought provoking poem..the pairs of shoes new and old, torn and mended, just fit the a pair of legs. I enjoyed this poem...thank you for sharing.. (Report) Reply

  • Kanav Justa (12/25/2013 1:57:00 AM)

    what a wonderful representation, , , absolutely loved this one, , , (Report) Reply

  • (12/23/2013 10:57:00 PM)

    excellent poem showing stories of every persons life status (Report) Reply

  • (12/23/2013 4:30:00 PM)

    Brilliant poem. Well done. Gets you thinking for sure. (Report) Reply

  • Wasan Hashim ibrahim (12/23/2013 2:49:00 PM)

    Dear thank you for sharing this artistic and thoughtful poem and for your footnote. It is also mentioned in the Holy Quran, Surah Taha, verse 12 Verily I am thy Lord! therefore (in My presence) put off thy shoes: thou art in the sacred valley Tuwa (Report) Reply

  • Jemima Rivas (12/23/2013 12:12:00 PM)

    thank you very detailed work (Report) Reply

  • Sekharan Pookkat (12/23/2013 6:44:00 AM)

    Why do we remove shoes? or bent our head in front of HIM.? Whether we recognized or not- I do not know.
    HE is greater than all. different kinds of shoes represents different thoughts- neatly placed shows their character and we can assess them- nicely written - your observation power is great- I appreciate you
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  • (12/23/2013 1:26:00 AM)

    Very different and thought-provoking! (Report) Reply

  • Tapashya Das (12/23/2013 12:34:00 AM)

    galivent thoughts! pleasure reading..... wow! keep inking mam! (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Saturday, December 21, 2013

Poem Edited: Saturday, December 21, 2013

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