Life denuded of soul
a carnal mess
of tawdry passions- -
love, cacophonous
dissonant sighing
from hearts of calculation- -
mechanical rotation
of day and night
in an endless cycle
of purblind vision
and pyrrhic victory- -
alloyed compassion from hearts
of adulterated joys
we are at odds
at odds with ourselves.
Nosheen Irfan © 2016
We are creatures of evolutionary instinct. Controlled by our brains and chemical releases from the endocrine system. Once we realize this, we can consciously choose to be at odds with what our minds try to force us to do and feel, and thus do what is logical and correct for us
The dual nature of humans is a constant struggle for all of us. Well done - a 10.
Nice poem. sometimes we notice, otherwise not. your method of saying or the flow of poem is impressive
Alienation from one's own true nature and self is well described in this poem through a series of well-chosen adjectives that stand for what we really are not. One can be really free only when one is denuded of all these false coverings. Well done. (10)
A pragmatic write! Appreciated the underlying philosophy! Top score! !
Beautiful writing Nosheen Thank you for sharing Mario Odekerken
Your poem reminds me of Faust's belief we have two souls: one is visionary which pulls us toward what is good, true and beautiful; the other is is purely animal instinct, immediate gratification, no spiritual dimension. Faust concludes just like your poem that we are fighting a battle inside our hearts and minds over their competing claims. I have no doubt your visionary soul will prevail and become stronger in the process - and write the poems that will inspire the rest of us to Victory
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
The very first line explains modern man's plight! ' Life denuded of soul'..... something has basically gone wrong here....! Man devoid of soul has only a physical existence and such a man will be at odds with everything! Pure joy and bliss of life is possible only if body and soul coexist as a harmonious entity..... A highly philosophical write!