Amberlee Carter

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Because I Could Not Compete With Skyscrapers And Swing Dancers - Poem by Amberlee Carter

[ or: My heart is full of love for you- that I can't use ]


Because now
there is nothing more between us, except,
39 hours and 54 minutes that translates into:
distance


Because this is the last poem
I will ever dedicate to the splendor
that is your existence-
however flawed and creased,
however beautiful and eternal


Because every night I spend, restless
drinking with the moon, watching
as he molds the sky in likeness of your body-
contorts your torso like clouds until
they weep lightning

Because the bed will never
smell of your sweat, and my pillow
will forget the fragrance of
your breath-
and because tonight,
the first time in a long time;
the stars outshine your eyes

Because the absolution of death
could not come at a sweeter hour-
the moment after I lit love’s pyre
and left your ghost aspiring warmth from itself-

Because I forgive you
for ever loving me at all-
I forgive you because;
the heart loves like fire and
breaks like water


Comments about Because I Could Not Compete With Skyscrapers And Swing Dancers by Amberlee Carter

  • (5/25/2006 10:35:00 AM)


    oh my God. ..superb. (Report) Reply

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  • (3/24/2006 6:50:00 AM)


    And because i love this.
    Joe
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  • (2/11/2006 12:46:00 PM)


    Infact, the only good thing about this poem is the first stanza, though that has got nothing with the rest. (Report) Reply

  • (1/2/2006 4:09:00 PM)


    I loved every bit of it except the first stanza. I'm not sure it fits with the intensity and power that I found in the rest of the poem. Nevertheless, very well written. (Report) Reply

  • (10/24/2005 10:44:00 PM)


    ....
    what can I say when I read something like this.. I'm in awe..
    well done'
    HBH
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  • (10/8/2005 7:18:00 PM)


    Amberlee, this is a spledid poem. (Report) Reply

  • (9/9/2005 2:06:00 PM)


    Your heart breaking like water was a striking image. Simple but full of impact. (Report) Reply

  • (8/6/2005 10:08:00 AM)


    I don't think this is a cliche, though it's certainly a subject many cliches have been written about. I can see you and feel you there. I don't think I've ever encounted the precise sentiments, or the phrases you use, ever before. I know the sense of time measuring (emotional) distance, that you begin the poem with. (Report) Reply

  • (6/10/2005 10:29:00 AM)


    Wonderful poem! You could not describe things any better. Bravo! (Report) Reply

  • (5/29/2005 6:35:00 AM)


    It's wonderful Amberlee, even so sad, indeed. I already read it on another place, but still like it a lot.
    (Metalcove)
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  • (5/27/2005 11:56:00 AM)


    A poem written with tears that somehow formed words. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, May 26, 2005

Poem Edited: Friday, May 7, 2010


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