'Cleopatra' works well as haiku. I like the gold and asp references because they are two images at opposite ends tugging with each other. Cleopatra still has that animal magnetism that attracts writers and readers. I'm wondering if you're going to keep playing and experimenting with haiku.
You started so well......too short, you could really make this great, remember how she was used by Ceaser, then cast aside by Mark Anthony.....the venomous snakes were the men in her life.....you have a good style but if you sit back and think of the great nation of Egypt and all the pressure on her, you could really make this a tragic poem, you have the skill to do it...why not? I only gave you a 4 this time.....but await you to resubmit or penn a new one? A challenge from me to you.......
Many a true word spoken in but a small sentence.
You have nailed it with this one, I sometimes take Five
Hundred words to say as much, but can recognise your
brevity as true CLASS.
Well written and Thanks for your note.