Drunken Senses... Poem by Vaibhav Pandey

Drunken Senses...

Rating: 3.6

All my senses sank into the black water
and clasped onto a world unknown.
The Reality got merged with the illusion
and frightened the ant I flew on....

Samanyan Lakshminarayanan 10 October 2009

'and frightened the ant i flew on'...just in four lines you come out with lovely imagery...reality getting merged with illusion..almost like a dream..senses are always drunk either with joy or despair..the black water here colors the poem...despair..lovely

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Kesav Easwaran 11 October 2009

the reality and the illusion...good symbolic write...the black water and the ant are the symbols you use well there...thanks...10

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Rm. Shanmugam Chettiar 11 October 2009

a matured vision. shan

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i have never been drunk, but i get what you said.. from stories told to me.. it is the same.

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Sarvesh Kulkarni 13 October 2009

fantastic, as always, my friend! loved the poem. thank you.

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Now you must have been pretty drunk to fly on an ant! ! Great imagination and a twist at the finish. Well done. Karin

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Rani Turton 23 October 2009

Riding on an ant...original, Vaibhav!

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Akram Saqib 21 October 2009

great effort to express feelings

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Shashendra Amalshan 20 October 2009

Heh! ! Carl can be very harsh at times... But I feel this is a very imaginative piece Vaibav.. True it is kinda short, but very nice imagery... A different poem. cheers Shan

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Carl Harris 19 October 2009

Well, this poem was disappointing, Vaibhav, for after the fine three lines, the fourth and concluding line was disappointing and I felt there should have been more to this brief poem. A poet of your impressive ability should have been able to carry the ideas you expressed a bit further and to a more satisfying conclusion. Carl.

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