As we roamed under the star spangled sky,
Sharing many a trivial thought
I failed to voice my clandestine whim
Carefully structured within my mind's alcove
When words got suddenly broken up
With a lump forming in my throat
I failed to convey what I meant
In a language explicit for you to grasp
Gazing at each other, as we stood
Without uttering a word aloud
You failed to notice my saddened eyes
Glistening with tears, about to shed
At the end of a pleasant united jaunt
As our roads diverged in opposite tracks
We failed to say even a parting word
As a gesture of courtesy, due for both
Now in the twilight of the setting sun
When the past has dwindled slowly away
We remain in our own cloistered cells
Failing to forget what has transpired.
A lost opportunity never to be recaptured - beautifully expressed and very poignant.
But there are lessons to be learned from your experience we think... On one side you appear to have lost your chance to speak out yourself. But on the other side I feel it is tragic that the other person happens to be indifferent to notice 'your saddened eyes'. Life has such phases of hit or miss experiences and as a compensation perhaps a day will come when someone never fails even to read out your inner woes even when they are not outwardly expressed.
the smooth flow of words flowing with intense emotion of love and longing and a tinge of sadness with unseen tears is beautiful....
Valsa, what an awesome poem! lot of thing we shall meet our own tears, we fall into the deepest hole of uncertainty..like there is no hope to survive but you know Valsa, we may see soon something we not expect what we will have....and it only belong to us who struggle to win...otherwise if we surrender we will win a suffering not positive thinking_Soul
Gazing at each other, as we stood Without uttering a word aloud You failed to notice my saddened eyes Glistening with tears, about to shed ......... so touching. Failure is appropriate here. A beautiful poem nicely executed.
At the end of a pleasant united jaunt As our roads diverged in opposite tracks We failed to say even a parting word As a gesture of courtesy, due for both - - - - - - - - A painful moment , so nicely captured in this poem.Thanks for sharing.
Gazing at each other, as we stood Without uttering a word aloud You failed to notice my saddened eyes Glistening with tears, about to shed Who cares for a truthful eyes the best translator of the heart.
Very touching indeed....Valsa....very beautifully scripted with wonderful words....
We remain in our own cloistered cells Everyone lives in a cell. These days everyone has a cell. Beautiful poem.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
U fail to 4get hun. Ah a wonderful romantic poem upon memories. Yah pal go try to rekindle d feelings.