Raven wings spread in air
Engulfing in cloud of despair
The tiny delicate soul
In darkness of wisdom lore
Dreading the flutter of petals
Trampled under petals to dry-
A very tender, caring poem, its title belies its content, thank you,10 Lynda xx
'the darkness of wisdom lore' calls to mind the despair of youth in the face of age and tradition, not allowing a tiny delicate soul to spring forth and flutter in fresh springs bearing joyous petals of genius. A deep insightful poem - a sraight 10
I am always curious about the titles of short poems. A title is the most important aspect of a short poem. The reader must reference the title for meaning in a poem like this. Sometimes, it doesn't come through if the poem is more obscure. The more clear the title the less clear the poem must be. But, the connection to the title must be easily found in the poem. GW62
The soul in darkness takes wing through despair clouds…its ‘petals’, tampered, fluttering in fear…the words ‘tiny’ and ‘delicate’ add to the fear factor…can qualify petals equally well And petals to dry? Well…to get the wound in mind healed, wisdom must prevail… You had something beautiful to tell in your mind, Vidyadhar…and you have come out almost well in telling it good…10
You could bring out surrealistic allusion so well in this poem
You have painted fragility in the most beautiful and memorable way. Exceptional work. Warm regards, Sandra
Dreading the flutter of petals Trampled under petals to dry-...................... the blue when desccicated by the darkness petals still dry by the winds of fear wings when trembles to flutter fear still blows by the apprehension...............the eloquence flows by the lucidity ingenoius, well penned,10+, thanks for sharing
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Very very tender and delicate write - it sounds nice - a word flow so light, though the title is 'Fear' - i remember your 'Jealousy' by you - another one tender write on a scary subject - well done