Just a second, no a minute, maybe more
With Him I wish to spend eternity
His touch is golden, so uplifting, hands so strong
Im sure he is my destiny
Oh love unending, funny and caring, heart so pure
He worships my femininity
But Alas what now? who's this lad, all so raw
He so tickles my fancy
Looks so bad but pulls me nigh, strong as Thor
He now rules my fantasy
I'm sure its him no its him, who wins this war
Who will sing my melody?
He came first, he is my best o' Te Amor
He is always jolly
He came next, caught in his nest, i opened my door
This is real harmony
I have tried him, but not him, shall i break that wall?
He might call me baby
I will do just that, i shall not fall
I will be his lady
nice poem. i like how u expressed yourself in this poem. keep up the good work.
Thats true..a feeling that can be put off only through the poetry.. Him..or..him
Better you end it. No need of trangular war. You make relation with eternal beauty of poetry and art. Will get much to shelter your thirsty soul. Man is basically alone......Any way, the poem is no doubt very interesting but getting confused whom are you confronting with....your destiny OR the third person who wants to flag on your loving land...that is your beloved one. Really confusing. Otherwise nice write.
Wow I really like this poem! ! It can be so frustrating having two people that is dear to your heart, but always go with what your heart tells you. Looking forward to the ending.
I think it isn't easy to choose in such situation. But I hope she will be fine.
Speechless! This is absoulutly great! Im glad to see you write about real life things, that can be hard to do, with all the confusment great job!
Ralph you are good. I sense alot of your background in the poem. On the whole good one
The pulls and pushes of confusing relationships. This is a tricky topic to write about. Writing about two people in a relationship are difficult, adding a third person or dimension can cause the reader to lose focus. I do sense the humor in your words and of course, let us wait and see whom she chooses.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
You did job as well as u wanted to do, so clear as you described there, i like it! ! ! it was like ok i am going here but then wait, i think...hmmmm....opsss no it's not and arhhhh... the write is good, i am sure you can bring more in the next write.keep it up_Unwritten Soul