Vallerie Lobell


I Got No Right On A Poetry Site - Poem by Vallerie Lobell

I do not come close, what's lacrymose?
What's a sonnet or a pentameter,
What's worse I don't know open verse,
I got no right on a poetry site,

I gotta read more Yeats and Keats,
And Kilmer's trees to feel more at ease,
Never got chances at the creative dances,
Oh, when subjects turn to grecian urns,

Ameteur among sages, all my wasted pages,
Still having fun when day is done,
Trying to figure out what others are saying,
In words their writing is diplaying,

Some just zoom right past me, don't even have a clue,
Others come crashing down when they feel just like I do,
Seen some heads butting over correction and suggestions,
Try not to get involved, their own problems they can solve,

See many who are new with just a poem or two,
Try to give a good honest rate and encourge when I do,
Misspellings and typos I've had my share,
Hope to be excused, if anybody cares,

But this site has been kind and most people that I find,
Are aware of my plight trying to get the words right,
I'll check the local library cause I really want to learn,
Maybe there will be some improvement.....on my return,


Comments about I Got No Right On A Poetry Site by Vallerie Lobell

  • (5/25/2008 12:15:00 AM)

    My friend write what you feel, as you feel it....in whatever manner you chose....as poetry in fact is 'the window to the soul.' Excellent composition! (Report)Reply

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  • (6/4/2007 1:21:00 AM)

    Put on some Bob Dylan or Tom Waits....save the gas...you just write from the heart and the gut. (Report)Reply

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  • (10/29/2006 9:52:00 PM)

    i enjoyed it fully which brings out the confusion and uncertainty of a writer at some stage or other...but dont feel diffident with all your nice poems including this...love prasanna (Report)Reply

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  • (10/8/2006 1:49:00 PM)

    Here! here! we all need time and space to grow and develope as poets, a strong write
    Love duncan X
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  • Ernestine Northover (10/8/2006 11:08:00 AM)

    Hey! This is a good write, very well expressed and says what a lot of us feel. thanks for being our spokeswoman. Keep at it.
    Love and hugs Ernestine XXX
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  • (10/6/2006 12:48:00 PM)

    this is how I feel a lot of the time...and the other half I just don't care because no one really understands my poems anyway. ;) thanks for commenting! !
    -landrey
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  • (9/30/2006 2:21:00 AM)

    Vallerie, don't let despair choose your words unless its what you're writing about! You could have re-titled this verse 'I've got this Site on Poetry right...' and not only been right, but rather forthright. Practise makes poetry perfect, lots. Poetry is hidden within the poet and moves into the poet's words - if you keep them simple without too much structure. Eg:

    rhyme, rhythm and metre
    are the poet’s meat and drink
    but some let structure defeat
    the expression of simple words.

    Keep on writing.
    Ivan
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  • (9/29/2006 9:23:00 PM)

    yes you do have a right and a very very great right(write) ..it flows very well with direct imagery and tells a story so very good, , , , blessings....Cecil (Report)Reply

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  • (9/29/2006 12:43:00 PM)

    You've got EVERY right on this poetry site, Valerie, and you're doing fine as you are....I don't know what those things are either, ha ha. Great poem..

    Love, Fran xx
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  • Brian Dorn (9/29/2006 12:24:00 PM)

    Vallerie, I think a lot of us can relate to this, I know my dictionary gets plenty of use. There's no doubt in my mind that you belong... well done! !
    Brian
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  • (9/29/2006 12:11:00 PM)

    been there girl......i hear yah well...English isn't my first tongue- its Filipino. I had my shares of doubts too about constructions...but i stick to one thing....of what my little heart feels and wishes to share. You're on the sam page. I hear your heart well. Take care. reinalie (Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, September 29, 2006

Poem Edited: Tuesday, September 28, 2010


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