Valerie Dohren

Gold Star - 6,961 Points (13 January 1947 / Southport)

Lie With Me - Poem by Valerie Dohren

Lie with me
in a golden field of sun-ripened corn
beneath a beckoning sky

We shall listen to the gentle breeze
rising and falling, rising and falling
in sweet crescendos
synchronised with our love –

whispering, whispering

Lie with me
we shall seal our togetherness
with moistened lips
and eager breaths

before the falling of the sun
and the coming of the mellowing night

Comments about Lie With Me by Valerie Dohren

  • Heather Wilkins (6/11/2013 11:49:00 AM)

    a beautiful write gentle and sweet feeling to it. love this write (Report) Reply

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  • (5/26/2013 1:53:00 PM)

    What beautiful quiet images. (Report) Reply

  • (5/24/2013 12:37:00 PM)

    Ah! Free verse that says something with great sweetness and purity.A body with soul.
    So beautiful in expression. If you can can do this well without rhyme, so let it be.
    WORTH AN 11
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  • (5/24/2013 11:17:00 AM)

    As only a poet can paint with words the intense feeling of Love. Very beautiful, Val (Report) Reply

  • Paul Brookes (5/16/2013 3:06:00 PM)

    exquisitely executed piece beautiful and tender by turns 10/10 Thanks for sharing BB : O) (Report) Reply

  • (5/15/2013 7:50:00 PM)

    It is a romantic flutter of high intensity love......
    Hope there is oasis in the desert of this love and mere mirages won`t still seduce the tender love.
    (Report) Reply

  • Vipins Puthooran (5/14/2013 4:04:00 PM)

    Superb! ! ! ! Top markssss (Report) Reply

  • Diane Hine (5/14/2013 8:38:00 AM)

    Celebration of love - a delicate touch! (Report) Reply

  • Unwritten Soul (5/14/2013 5:54:00 AM)

    Surrendering dark for a fresh hope, that what your poem gently come and convinced heart to calm Val_Soul (Report) Reply

  • Kelvin Owusu (5/14/2013 2:33:00 AM)

    this is love wonderful simple love (Report) Reply

  • (5/13/2013 1:51:00 PM)

    Now that's what I'm talkin about, love, love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love (Report) Reply

  • Valsa George (5/13/2013 7:17:00 AM)

    Before it is too late, let us hasten up! sealing the togetherness with moist lips and eager breaths''.... An intense romantic aura surrounds the poem! ! (Report) Reply

  • (5/13/2013 3:04:00 AM)

    A simple poem that speaks of great love! Wonderful, Valerie! (Report) Reply

  • Allemagne Roßmann (5/12/2013 5:22:00 PM)

    Its an exquisite composition and pleasure reading through.Its also the title of a British English film featuring love stories of London and the percussions of togetherness of an english woman who by chance fell in love with an english man in club, took a job for a family dream but the man was in the turmoil of womanizing and a decision hard to reckon with for a family.Watched that in 2008 and that too in London itself and tried to experience the pain and pleasure.Your poetry added valour and voice to the feminine character. (Report) Reply

  • (5/12/2013 11:36:00 AM)

    A beautiful poem as always. (Report) Reply

  • David Wood (5/12/2013 11:14:00 AM)

    Another brilliant poem with good imagery. (Report) Reply

  • Hazel Durham (5/12/2013 8:56:00 AM)

    So beautiful with stunning imagery that caresses the mind and soul so lovingly! (Report) Reply

  • Gajanan Mishra (5/12/2013 8:33:00 AM)

    before the falling of he sun, thanks.
    I invite you to read my poems and comment.
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  • (5/12/2013 7:55:00 AM)

    oh my! how wonderful, every time i read your poem i feel like i have flow to the heaven and angels are singing a breathtaking melody....amazing mam bravo (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, May 12, 2013

Poem Edited: Monday, September 16, 2013

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