Valerie Dohren

Gold Star - 6,766 Points (13 January 1947 / Southport)

Mirage - Poem by Valerie Dohren

There are only shadows –
no substance
to an evaporating world.

Time has etched its purpose upon my soul,
eroding away all vestiges of hope,

and life has written the score
of a melancholy tune
upon my heart.

The way forward
is now obscure –

for the path is overgrown with weeds
and bracken.


looking towards the sun,
do I see a new dawn on the horizon,
a world of promise?

Through blurred eyes -
a mirage unfolds

in the distance.

Comments about Mirage by Valerie Dohren

  • Heather Wilkins (8/8/2013 6:42:00 PM)

    there is always hope for tomorrow. through blurred eyes a mirage unfolds. (Report) Reply

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  • Juan Olivarez (8/7/2013 8:18:00 AM)

    Valerie, no matter what type of poetry you write, you have no peers. I love this piece. Thank you for sharing, and for your friendship. (Report) Reply

  • Valsa George (7/31/2013 8:04:00 AM)

    At the end of the tunnel there is light! A new dawn waits to be unfolded! So dispel all gloom and look Eastward! ! As ever, beautiful! ! (Report) Reply

  • (7/30/2013 12:37:00 PM)

    A beautiful poem, there is always a way forward, we sometimes just
    have to take a different path. A great write.
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  • (7/30/2013 10:10:00 AM)

    Mirage is a beautiful write, VALERIE! VERY DEEP PHILOSOPHICAL POEM WHICH I ENJOYED! (Report) Reply

  • Godfrey Morris (7/28/2013 7:05:00 PM)

    Good write Val. Hope springs eternal. (Report) Reply

  • (7/28/2013 6:14:00 PM)

    Uncertainty is perhaps the most honest expectation, if one has expectations at all. (Report) Reply

  • Hazel Durham (7/28/2013 2:06:00 PM)

    With no hope to start with, then a new dawn shining to bring light to your life!
    Vibrant, deep and superb write!
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  • (7/27/2013 7:45:00 AM)

    very good write Val
    wondeful imagery make this poem alive
    thanks for sharing
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  • Yasmin Khan (7/26/2013 3:03:00 AM)

    Sometimes hopelessness sits in our hearts and the path ahead blurs but any mirage can be a pool of water. Your ideas are expressed beautifully in metaphors and images and hope shines bright in the end. :) (Report) Reply

  • (7/25/2013 11:00:00 PM)

    Without hope of a brighter future we have little to look forward to and even less to live for, perhaps the mirage is a good omen, nicely written...... (Report) Reply

  • Heather Wilkins (7/25/2013 5:55:00 PM)

    a very good write Valerie. through burred eyes a mirage unfolds. good quote. enjoyed (Report) Reply

  • Tirupathi Chandrupatla (7/25/2013 4:41:00 PM)

    The way forward
    is now obscure...
    Eyes are blurred when you look toward the sun. Maybe the mirage will get clear and a path to a green land will be seen. Thank you for a nice poem posing the problem.
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  • (7/25/2013 2:26:00 PM)

    A mirage that may transport you into a shangri-la land of fine poetry. You can do it with your
    glorious sonnets, just believe
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  • (7/24/2013 9:49:00 PM)

    I love how you can so easily switch from a much more classical style to a very free and yet still poetic form. Some modern poetry is like prose but this, your Mirage certainly is not like prose. Mirage communicates, as poetry should, the deepest feelings where words, thoughts and vivid images come together as one., using a personal form for it all. Very nice (Report) Reply

  • Patricia Grantham (7/24/2013 9:28:00 AM)

    Where there is life there is always hope. Just like a dream can be true
    to life so can a mirage be too. Never give up hope. Good write.
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  • (7/24/2013 5:29:00 AM)

    we need them, even if they're just mirages, in order to survive. Amazing poetry indeed! (Report) Reply

  • David Wood (7/24/2013 5:10:00 AM)

    I hope your new dawn is not a mirage and that it is full of hope. (Report) Reply

  • Lucifera Santez (7/24/2013 5:02:00 AM)

    a mirage unfolds in the distance.
    a meaningful read.
    as usual a gem of finest waters.
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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, July 24, 2013

Poem Edited: Wednesday, July 24, 2013

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