My Dream Poem by David DeSantis

My Dream

Rating: 3.4


Let go,
of the
thinly veiled demons,
Disguised as dreams.

Of the
Orchid topped leaves,
with roots made of poison.

Let go,
of the
corporate bank sleeves,
Stolen from laymen.

Or the
Blonde’s short seams,
To find missing meaning.

Let go,
of the
Thoughts from the past
They will haunt your being

And the
Memories that last,
To keep is destruction.

To be free
Is peace
And in all there is seeing

Learn from the past
Let go of the dream.



Copyright (c) David DeSantis

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
David Harris 09 April 2008

David, letting go of the past does help, especially those who are so critical without being constructive. Their destructive force can cancel out our perfect dreams. Another beautiful poem. Top marks and thanks for sharing it my friend. David

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Alison Cassidy 11 April 2008

Something tells me your 'letting go' is not of a spiritual nature, but rather something driven by angst and disappointment - suicide perhaps? This poem is tightly structured with some great images. Distinctive poetry from a talented pen. love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

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Abha Sharma 12 April 2008

What I perceived from these well constructed lines is that do not linger to the painful past, learn from it and do not live in a artificial world of dreams… let go whatever seems to be detrimental, very thoughtful and pleasure generating…

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Sulaiman Mohd Yusof 14 April 2008

hey david.......your perception of your dream is very descriptive and so fascinating.......u got the touch pal!

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Jurietta Duraan 15 April 2008

Very deep and also encouraging.... thanks for popping in.... you write well. Yuri*

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Francesca Zumbo 17 June 2008

'of the orchid topped leaves, with roots made of poison'.. really love that. This poem i like because to me its about temptation, and those moments before you soak yourself in it. Dangerous

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John Tiong Chunghoo 26 April 2008

there is a brevity in your poem i love very much david. perhaps your originality will start from there. keep on.

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R H 24 April 2008

The opening stanza sets the tone for this poem - the 'thinly veiled demons' that lurk and beckon may be disguised as something pleasing to the eye but beneath the surface something far less appealing awaits. To be free of such demons, whether they hide in the past, present or future takes strength of character, and the ability to let go... another though provoking write David...j x

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Duncan Wyllie 24 April 2008

YOu show a lot of powerful narative hear David, skillfully displayed Take care Love duncan X

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Robert Howard 22 April 2008

Another ingenious shift of title meaning. It seems that some dreams aren't so good. If you are not careful of what you wish for, may find yourself in the middle of a mirage munching on dust.

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