Ben Paynter

Veteran Poet - 1,430 Points (Midwest)

Off Ramp - Poem by Ben Paynter

the wrecking ball sun
swung out towards the west,
and I raced it on the highway
window open, radio on,

wind whipping
past hair and eyes and a desperate grin
that held no countenance,
while the bitter lights
From the city behind, shone
with a little less sparkle,

a little less welcoming, a little
more of a “what could you
have possibly hoped for? ”
and there it is, the exit,

that little blue bird, that little ray
of light that never quite leaves, just hides,
and begs to escape,
and I wonder,
will we ever escape

Comments about Off Ramp by Ben Paynter

  • (11/3/2016 11:04:00 PM)

    Begs to escape
    and I wonder,
    will we ever escape
    Nice write. Congrats on member POD.
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  • Mohammed Asim Nehal (11/3/2016 1:32:00 PM)

    Nice Imagery
    Congrats for the honours of POTD...........Wonderful poem.10++ (Report) Reply

  • Seamus O' Brian (11/3/2016 10:15:00 AM)

    I was captured by the first two lines, then stayed for the ride. Very imaginative and vivid piece. Well done, and congratulations! (Report) Reply

  • Barry Middleton (11/3/2016 7:27:00 AM)

    Very thought provoking and well done. Congratulations on poem of the day. (Report) Reply

  • Edward Kofi Louis (11/3/2016 4:34:00 AM)

    The exit
    To escape! ! Thanks for sharing this poem with us. (Report) Reply

  • (11/3/2016 2:55:00 AM)

    Superb write. Profound. Beautifully descriptive. (Report) Reply

  • Bernard F. Asuncion (11/3/2016 2:08:00 AM)

    that little blue bird, that little ray
    of light that never quite leaves, just hides,

    Congrats for being chosen for the day!
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  • Pamela Sinicrope (11/3/2016 1:22:00 AM)

    Such a well done poem. I really like the imagery and the wrecking ball sun really captured my attention and kept me reading. (Report) Reply

  • Kim Barney (11/3/2016 12:19:00 AM)

    Poem of the day
    Has come your way!
    You never sought it,
    But now you've got it!
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  • Ernestine Northover (1/6/2007 2:49:00 PM)

    I liked this write. Great imagery, one could feel, see, hear what was going on in the verses. Gets better the more you read it. Excellently written poem. Great interpretation.
    Love and hugs Ernestine XXX
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Poem Submitted: Saturday, January 6, 2007

Poem Edited: Saturday, December 18, 2010

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