Our Choice Poem by Aufie Zophy

Our Choice

Rating: 5.0


Walking on a hot and scorching day
We meet a splitting of the way
A way downwards looking shady, some trees are there
A way upwards, sandy without trees, just looking bare

Somewhere deep inside we know
The downwards shady path goes low
And down that place, there is no tree
Just heat and sweat and more ennui

Somewhere deep inside we are aware
That the way up, though initially a little bare
Will bring us to a place with lots of shade and big relief
It is God’s way, so I believe

Shall we choose the way below with instant pleasure?
Leading down to a place of heat, we cannot measure
Or shall we make little effort on the upper way?
And enjoy shade and breeze day by day

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Jerry Buckley 26 January 2012

Great allegory.... Well done.. Thanks for your kind comment to Your Turn

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Richard McClellan 21 October 2011

Awesome poem fellow poet!

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Lenore Lee 08 September 2011

Like all of your poems, this has an important meaning. I think it is heart moving and it says to me to be careful with your life choices, for instant pleasure is not always the best road.

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Unwritten Soul 21 August 2011

Some choices just clear as that, so we can rejoice like what it reflect...But some choices just blur and enveloped in mystery ground then we will hard to choose what the best without lose...It very nice poem and may birds will come and show us what the best, if shady tree turn autumn where the heat could reach both places.. :) _Unwritten Soul

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Raeanne Furfaro 15 August 2011

Well written and very spiritual without being overtly so. I like the images of the lower path that is easier or a small effort for the higher path. I like the contrasts in the paths as well. Very well done and thought provoking. Thank you for sharing this.

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Dr Dillip K Swain 02 August 2023

Read this fabulous poem with interest and appreciated the ending: shall we make little effort on the upper way? And enjoy shade and breeze day by day. Top score!

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Tom Allport 19 November 2017

a wonderful poem of how choosing different paths in life can change not just our lives but can also be to the benefit of others? ....................beautifully written Aufie

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Erika Wingo 23 November 2012

Your talent is truly a gift to all who have the pleasure of reading your work. You are definitely one of my favorite poets. I just drift dreamily away to the final thrilling destination each of your poems takes the reader to. You have God given talent my friend!

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Robert Beck 28 October 2012

All of your poems are created from deep thought and each offers the reader a lesson of life. You have a wise manner of writing and your mature wisdom always shines through.

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Ekaterina M. Polischuk 30 March 2012

awesome poem.... it is more than just a verse. it is a message. true words. really we should choose our way by ourself and we must know what way is right or wrong.... Midway upon the journey of our life I found myself within a forest dark, For the straightforward pathway had been lost. (Dante Alighieri)

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