JOSE MURGUIA

Our Love Was.

our love was like a fish out the sea,
like a blind person who couldn't see,
like a star that was no longer bright,
our love was a struggling fight

our love was like a dove who could't fly,
like the ocean that went dry,
like a sun with out the shine,
i remember you once were mine

our love was just a moment in time,
our love i believe was a crime,
our love was, our love is?
our love should have never been like this........

1/14/2009
Copyright ©2009 Jose Murguia

Poem Submitted: Wednesday, January 14, 2009
Poem Edited: Saturday, February 21, 2009

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  • Cynthia Ulloa (1/2/2010 3:20:00 AM)

    i love this! ! beautiful writing. la verdad. :)

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  • Mahsa Mahdavi (9/24/2009 1:51:00 PM)

    your way of writing is facsinating.never stop writing.This poem was nice too...

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  • C. P. SharmaC. P. Sharma (2/14/2009 6:19:00 AM)

    Good rhyme, rhythm and flow but narrow focus on love.
    CP

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  • Kelli Richards (2/13/2009 10:20:00 PM)

    i love how you compare love to these different things.

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  • Kranthi Pothineni (2/13/2009 10:16:00 PM)

    A very good flow of feel and expressions...very good lines

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  • Lawrence S. Pertillar (1/23/2009 10:59:00 PM)

    I enjoy reading your poem. It questions what love 'was' and I wonder 'why'.

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  • Miriam Maia PaduaMiriam Maia Padua (1/20/2009 8:28:00 AM)

    nicely written..but why the love so vulnerable...crippled...?
    very touching.....it gives a pinch in my heart...
    your piece is very convincing.....10+++++

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  • Patti Masterman (1/19/2009 10:30:00 AM)

    I like the next to last line:
    'our love was, our love is? '
    which communicates that things are still evolving
    and nothing that's so real is ever truly a closed book.

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  • sumaira .....ir (1/19/2009 4:49:00 AM)

    Another wonderful writin lov poem... Sensitive and hav deep emotions of lov...

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  • Mark Fenton (1/19/2009 4:38:00 AM)

    Nice clear imagery that does justice to the subject. Bravo!

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  • Dolan Doran (1/18/2009 8:29:00 PM)

    it has an interesting beat to it. good similes...

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  • Argenis Hernandez (1/18/2009 5:53:00 PM)

    my fingers snap throughout this poem. well done

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  • Dark Gurl 55 (1/18/2009 2:26:00 AM)

    OoHh..!
    amazing poem i swear..
    where did u get this from..? !

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  • Sunand Sharma (1/17/2009 10:07:00 PM)

    Differnt view to describe love...words are simple and touching...great work..! ! !

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  • John Smith (1/17/2009 5:41:00 PM)

    Beautifully written, great rhythm and flow to the peice. Job well done! :)

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  • A Poet Who Loves To Sing Alves (1/16/2009 11:16:00 AM)

    Salute! Written with clarity!

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  • Brenda Arroyo (1/16/2009 9:43:00 AM)

    I can relate to this...
    I like how you compared your love to a crime.

    It felt so wrong, it felt so right.

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  • DELETED NOW (1/15/2009 12:42:00 PM)

    that is really nice I am going to add it to my favs

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  • John Fieldson (1/14/2009 7:30:00 PM)

    Nice style to this poem,
    sums up the kind of relationships
    many of us find ourselves in.

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  • Sid John Gardner. (1/14/2009 6:51:00 PM)

    Nice one about this sites greates topic..10 MARKS.
    Sid.

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