(Picnic)atop a lonesome patient hill,
Where serenity does (take place)to heal
The air (passing)to go placid to fill
The atmosphere with warmth (much that)they feel
Is the passion (surely) that remains still
Ever (to be)tougher than reinforced steel.
In each other's eyes (wanting)as they will,
The duo vision love (within that does wheel
(With bliss) finer than flour done by the mill
(Of grains) , ravishing as they take their meal.
nice to see the other side of your pen. However difficult we all have vowed internally to master the language of love or is it passion :)
you have done good..nice poem..the last two lines are in covert..clap clap
Well done Obinna, this was truly a sensuous read to ponder.Never be still, keep climbing that hill.The best, PRINCE
Fully cladding with passion and metaphor… ‘Where serenity does (take place) to heal’ ~ Hill Tops makes bosom broaden and full of Bliss that you’ve portrayed very beautifully nice joy ride… thanks sharing… Regards Ms. Nivedita UK 10/10
A romantic love poem, with charming rhyming and powerful imageries, good only for the learned. O' Eruchie, you're a complex poet in the like of Wole Soyinka, the William Shakespeare of Africa!
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Quite often, a place makes all the difference. By making it atop the hill, the couple have carried their love to its height. The unique blend of height, greenery, waft of rejuvenating breeze, ineffable solitude, vast blue skies, and overview from there, everything that is there … catalyzes the chemistry of their love. An elevating poem with a sweet rhyme.