Senryu- Drowning Poem by Valsa George

Senryu- Drowning

Rating: 5.0


The black hole gapes wide
Lower and lower I sink
Until sucked fully

Friday, February 12, 2016
Topic(s) of this poem: despair
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Kavya . 12 February 2016

Wow loved this new style of poetry Mam, Senryu,3 lines and 17 syllables! Beautifully written!

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Kelly Kurt 12 February 2016

Many people feel this way at points in life

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Nosheen Irfan 12 February 2016

The terrible experience of drowning described with perfection. And thats how we often feel when all hope is gone. So both in literal n metaphorical senses drowning couldnt have been described better.

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Akhtar Jawad 13 February 2016

Considering despair as a black hole is an amazing idea, and if it's a black hole then we are helpless before it. A thoughtful three liner.

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Tirupathi Chandrupatla 14 February 2016

Einstein's gravitational waves were caught recently. The power of the black hole is revealed.

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Anjandev Roy 20 July 2020

Brilliant piece.....thank u....anjandev roy.

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Great brevity! Despair is depicted in just three brilliant lines. Beautifully crafted Senryu.

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Aniruddha Pathak 21 August 2019

The Senryu depicts despair beautifully.

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Edward Kofi Louis 08 February 2019

The Black Hole! ! ! ! Thanks for sharing this poem with us.

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Dr Dillip K Swain 20 January 2018

'The black hole gapes'....the gradual process of sinking......! You have depicted volumes of despair in this short poem! The brevity of expression is adorable. Thanks dear madam for sharing....10

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