Amberlee Carter

Rookie - 0 Points (12-16-1981 DOD: everyday)

...Shaving My Legs

Poem by Amberlee Carter

....shaving my legs to enya,
it makes me feel clean.
you've got free long distance-
you should visit more often.
so much is so easily lost in the space
between your tongue and my heart-
you lick my breasts well you know

i wonder
are you still thinking over
that meaningless thing i said a week ago-
(about the other guy and the other girl)
who would be us-
he would say never and she, forever
as they parted lips thighs and hips-
Hollywood will never capture the pulsating ebb of love,
but they can fake it well.

i heard your voice yesterday,
as you passed through my dreambed-
my stomach resembles a fish bowl,
and your words are like virgin goldfish about to orgasm.

my thoughts are on my love,
the calm morning that woke before me-

i slithered from beneath my sticky sheets,
all reckless and abandoned,
counting the penance for last night's sins.

there has to be more than this:
sour coffee and DefPoetryJam reruns-
while my love showers

in the next room

in another city

Comments about ...Shaving My Legs by Amberlee Carter

  • Fidel Arcenas (3/27/2009 9:50:00 PM)

    in another city
    in another room

    my mind breaks the distance
    between verses and desires
    bursting in far away skies

    yet I hear the joyous moans
    of words and see the flawless skin
    excruciating in rhymes of ecstasy

    i reach out and nothing
    yet I now - you are there

    in another room
    in another city(Report)Reply

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  • fanniesson - (9/30/2006 10:28:00 PM)

    this one tells me i have to come back
    and read all your works
    you have a wonderful style
    i really enjoy your thoughts(Report)Reply

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  • G. Murdock (12/7/2005 12:27:00 PM)

    I feel as if I've stumbled into the ladies room. An intimacy dislodged by all the gadgets and period music, but then captured by the lines at neck level, yanked back for another gander.
    I agree the last line clicks this to an end. Good work(Report)Reply

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  • Tallie Kane (4/29/2005 5:43:00 PM)

    What an amazing poem. I especially love the impact caused at the end of the poem, of the distance between two people. The way you write is so natural, and I hope to read more of your poetry,
    Tallie Kane(Report)Reply

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  • Pradeep Dhavakumar (2/16/2005 12:19:00 PM)

    Another good poem.Thank you.(Report)Reply

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  • Herbert Nehrlich1 (1/12/2005 7:36:00 PM)

    The shaving part wasn't as much as I had hoped for. Perhaps you would want to read my Legging It to add some spice? Normally I don't try to sell my poems this way.
    Enjoyed this, not just the last few lines.You are writing some good stuff.

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  • Rev. Dr. A. Jacob Hassler (1/12/2005 5:43:00 PM)

    yep, yep! fantastic indeed. the last few lines did it for me...(Report)Reply

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  • Jackson Kilroy (1/12/2005 5:39:00 PM)

    Loved the last few lines of this. Very nice.(Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, January 12, 2005