lungs taken by force
breath screamed without voice
heartbeat weaken increasingly
crystallized in the blood that flee
memories haunting
realities repeating
sealed every choice
killed any risk
black disappear so fast
radiance hold on to the maze
the rest is vacancy
remorse to the death that never be
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I do not fully understand the meaning of this, but it seems to be about a near death experience or on the threshold of death, the first stanza seems to talk about what is happening, the second is the feeling of what is happening and the third is you looking at the person dying. Great description full of dread and great twists of words. Lovely job!
Agony before death is wonderfully depicted by this poem! Keep it up by improvements further!
I have a question what's up with the numbers. Although you needn't feel inclined to answer. Very cool poem. Bien!
Very vivid. I could hear my heart pounding while I was reading. Fantastic rhyming.10++
black disappear so fast radiance hold on to the maze Though there is dread of the last breaths, still there is the radiance of hope! Enjoyed!
Yes I believe that dying can be an agonizing experience for some and not any for others. It is related to how we choose to live our life and especially our last days and how God decides to show us his mercy. A truly inspiring write.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
A good sensitive poem.