Darkness gets thinner
Crimson red colors the sky
Warm golden rays
Touch softly my closed eyes
As if the first kiss of love.
warm rays touch softly...... beautiful imagery.....diction is so apt and fitful that it may only compared to the set up of morning sky...... thanks.
First kiss of love, oh, yes, that's something we'll always remember! Thanks for sharing! ! ! !
A wonderful Tanka dear poetess.... just wonderful.5 stars.
The first ray of sun touches like a kiss.nice! thanks for sharing this lovely poem. 10++++
A beautiful paint on sunrise has been done. The darkness of the night is getting thinner, sky is looking crimson red, sun is giving golden rays. It creates first kiss of love in closed eye. Fantastic expression. Thank u dear madam, for sharing this lovely gem.10
I read it again and it was as fresh and delightful as the first time. Lovely! ! ! You joined that gentle first kiss of love with the soft and gentle moments of dawn and you did so Perfectly! ! Absolutely resonates with the magic of a first kiss. I'll give it another 10 but I have no idea if PH allows duplicate votes but I'll give it a try.
What a love and what a Kiss......Loved it...You created a magical moment with this Tanka...100+++++
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
The kiss of love by the first shafts of the morning sun! Lovely! !
Thank you very much for your kind words which feel like first shaft of morning sun.