The Story Of Sweat Poem by adheez van der beanthz

The Story Of Sweat

Rating: 3.3


this is a story about sweat..

that conceived by mom's prayer
- who make love with misery
born because of dad's love
- who was married to poverty
and being a kid who grow up
- in the hunger's loving caress

its spirits will fly to the sky
fuse with the clouds, also the stars
then melt into rain formations
to gain its own reputation

so its ancestry will meet the sunlight
refract the paradise
where the beauty become a bride
and happiness stay for the rest of the life

someday...


earthzcity,200813

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
This theme comes when I saw a construction worker who bathed in sweat, then I imagine his family and try to get into his mind and hope, of course in my own imagination
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Ellias Anderson Jr. 22 September 2013

God bless you...your heart is so pure dear adheez, i really love this work because of it's pure honesty and the truth that this sweats will be really sweet for their family who are looking forward the financials and the supporting.. well done

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Antonio Liao 26 September 2013

an oracle of state of the mind, resemble into reality of lines within your poem...such poetic venture quest the realm of challenges and truth of human journey of Life....Excellent master piece....a 10/10

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Musfiq Us Shaleheen 04 November 2013

nicely written and very poetic imagination...

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Sally Plumb Plumb 04 December 2013

A truly wonderful piece of work. Loved it.

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Hazel Durham 09 December 2013

Behind the sweat there is so many stories, with the will to survive, greatness can happen to everyone. Beautiful write!

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Sally Plumb Plumb 15 June 2014

This is a lovely piece of work.

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Gary H 26 March 2014

Very nice work here, i very much enjoyed it.

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Bing Hua 18 February 2014

SO CUTE. I like this one.

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Sallam Yassin 27 December 2013

the must important thing is that you r connected with the life - as we baked in our community and life there is the beat of your own keep up

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Bri Edwards 25 December 2013

ok, i just read your ph bio. so you write in one language and translate to english. i'm glad i don't have to try that. i would try to help you with english but it is more than i have time for now. besides, it would not be easy if i don't understand the meaning of the poem readily. :)

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