This Love Poem by mark nwagwu

good poem, Mark...the lines are eloquently expressive of your affection and attachment that the poem contains 10

'Floods my shoreless bones.....' lovely line and it stays with me... I am not as eloquent as Yoonoos Peerbocus but you are certainly deserving of his accolades... your poem is beautiful to read, and to look at. Yuri*

Tremendously written with superb words.Well done Mark!

Beautifully crafted and full of tenderness, thanks Mark Lynda xx

This declaration of love is so heavily set with sparkles in every shade, perfectly fitted into the torso of the poem. I like how you by the last line drive home the quiet pace of what comes before. I also like your earthly alliterations used give the reader that exact feeling of something heavenly. A beauty.

I do like it. But, I would say that I find the alliteration slightly heavy handed. There's a lot of it and I think if it were toned down a bit, it would make the poem better. Having said that, the concept is strong and I don't really see so much problem with the disconnected imagery. It adds a sense of endless variety to your love which makes it seem stronger.

How difficult it is to define love in words. It seems to me that your soaring (and, yes, somewhat disconnected) imagery is an attempt to do so thru images, since words alone do not suffice. A very honest and heartfelt sentiment, delivered with passion if not polish.

Since you asked, your imagery is very disconnected. I find it difficult to follow your train of thought.

I love the line...'sculpting silences in squeaking souls'...it's fantastic....this is such a lovely piece with a beautiful flow...great work