~ Unborn
Before she ever learned to trust
Her need to trust was born.
Before she ever knew the day
She recognized the morn.
Before she ever knew the game
She sensed the need to play.
But then, before she could emerge,
They whisked her life away.
woow! exiting title, and a well expresed feelings, and thoughts, go on really I loved you style in writing poetry, Thank you for sharing with us your knoledge.
well written poem on life to show how short it is! Thank you for sharing!
Wowee! That's a striking kind of sentiment. It grabs you fast. The message comes to the reader quickly. Thanks, Mark Walters
This is a very appealing piece, Adeline. I can even relate this to the situation of unborn infants or any aborted lives, hindered from developing or shining. Thanks for writing this.
A very emotive subject, yet simply and beautifully expressed here.
Adeline the thought of that Is this a word or feeling....iip
first I LIKED IT AS A POEM. i liked the rhyming sequence. maybe i'll try it IF i remember it. i found the comments almost as, if not more, interesting considering how i read the poem and Adeline's poet's notes. it appeared as though two of the commenters thought the poem was about the length of a human's life....i mean a human which IS born and lives for a number of years. and at least one reader feels Adeline is against abortion; she may be, i don't know, but i don't see that the poem says she is against it. thanks Adeline for sharing. bri (it would be interesting to know your views re abortion. i'm at least pro-choice, if not pro-abortion, but i do hear that decreased birth rates are causing some problems for some countries now and probably will in the future, especially when added to increased numbers of aging/disabled/sick/nonworking adults. thanks for the poet note.
Just like the poem, Life itself is brisk like morning dew. Great write.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Excellent! A well crafted and thought provoking write that clearly shows your poetic talent! 10+++ Thank you for sharing and keep giving the World more food for thought! God Bless You! Romeo-New York City