Mahfooz Ali

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When I Was Infatuated In Class Eighth... - Poem by Mahfooz Ali

As I sat in the school lounge,
reading a covered book prior to class.
A picturesque beauty sat directly in front of me,
I faced her profile less than a yard away.
Her loose curly locks and azure eyes,
conveyed existence and liveliness,
in this otherwise gloomy space.
I glanced down at my digital watch,
and abruptly realized class was soon to start.
I leaned down to my schoolbag on the floor in front of me,
and swiftly placed my textbook in.
As I closed my schoolbag and looked up,
she was now leaning towards me
asking for some unknown question,
her face only inches within mine.
I could feel her warm breath on my hair,
our eyes met, my heart was pounding.
Seconds felt like hours lost in time,
time here had lost of meaning,
time had no meaning here.
I walked away not saying a word,
her beauty forever burned in my mind.....

Comments about When I Was Infatuated In Class Eighth... by Mahfooz Ali

  • Aditi Chakraborty (2/9/2018 5:04:00 AM)

    And how these infatuations get lost in time :) ... Wonderfully written.. Please read my works too.... (Report) Reply

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  • Abhishek Arjav (1/29/2016 11:36:00 AM)

    Simplicity of diction and lucid treatment of an adolescent's mental state makes poem a worth read... (Report) Reply

  • The Poet Poet (1/19/2016 9:42:00 PM)

    She calls me
    my salaams lady friend
    I stand on the rivers bend
    anyday the tsunami may
    take me away
    till such a time
    a banker still consider me
    if you will
    sisss misss or friendsss....
    Poetry along with me
    shall not ever end

    sometimes when we are very young we get so very scared will she love me will she report me what will she do no one ever knew it's all in a woman's mind to love or to be kind but in memories we alone have she has made us lose our mind and an opportunity we all leave far behind in the annals of time call it infatuation if you may
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  • Bernard Snyder (1/19/2016 8:22:00 PM)

    What a great poem! Incredibly written. I'm sure you wished you'd responded though. Congrats on being chosen as poem of the day. Well deserved! (Report) Reply

  • (1/19/2016 6:57:00 PM)

    electrified and charged
    for lifetime
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  • Mohammed Asim Nehal (1/19/2016 11:01:00 AM)

    Nicely written poem on infatuation, at that age most of the students go thru the same phase...Thanks for sharing. (Report) Reply

  • Kim Barney (1/19/2016 8:58:00 AM)

    Ah, young love (or as you correctly call it, infatuation) . Well written and congratulations on having it selected as poem of the day! (Report) Reply

  • Savita Tyagi (1/19/2016 7:06:00 AM)

    Lovely poem. That sweet adolescent time is precious and your display of one small yet memorable event and the tender feelings that arise in an innocent heart is beautiful. (Report) Reply

  • Soul Watcher (1/19/2016 6:59:00 AM)

    Good to see this poem on the facebook page of poemhunter..
    Well done Mahfooz
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  • Jasbir Chatterjee (1/19/2016 3:55:00 AM)

    wow, what a lovely poem! Congrats on being poet of the day! May the memory of this day also burn forever in your soul... (Report) Reply

  • Edward Kofi Louis (1/19/2016 3:52:00 AM)

    The beauty of love! Touching the heart so deep. Nice work. (Report) Reply

  • Rajnish Manga (1/19/2016 3:38:00 AM)

    There is no dearth of encounters of a similar nature around us but the way you have nuanced the incident has made it incredibly adorable. Thanks, Mahfooz. (Report) Reply

  • Nosheen Irfan (1/19/2016 12:39:00 AM)

    Her beauty burned forever in my mind...The power of beauty is definitely undeniable. A beautiful expression of feelings written with clarity and candor. (Report) Reply

  • (3/14/2009 12:51:00 PM)

    wonderful infatuation
    and that too in std 8th
    so eyes met and hearts beat
    na pounded
    omg warm breath like
    a hot stove and time
    had lost its meaning
    -10 anjali
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  • Mahfooz Ali (3/14/2009 12:47:00 PM)

    hey! who has voted me 8?

    u r requested to pen comment also.......hehehehehe
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Poem Submitted: Saturday, March 14, 2009

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