2014 Poem by Shahzia Batool
2014
If God might let me walk the paths of 2014,
(ameen)
then I shall spend it
as a research scholar, a student of life;
I shall learn the tones of voices,
the moods' diction, the words unsaid;
steal the shades from the rainbow stripes,
the colored band,
and make them the ink for my new poems;
I shall snap the spell of silence, and
learn to talk aloud;
sanity will be my targeted objective...
the east sky will energize me
the west sky will be my Major;
I shall learn to break the metaphors
by reading the text of my dreams;
declare myself a soldier hard
against the seven deadly sins;
I shall learn the ways of sages
keeping sailors' vision
in their eyes, under their skins,
yes,
I shall rise and I shall shine
no way but this,
for the stars threatened me on terms,
have put a condition before me
that they won't talk to me
unless I become the leading luminary
brightening up my own horizon! ! !
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To all of you
Best wishes for the new year...stay safe!
it is your better poem but you keep it too personal...if you would have generalised it, even with the first person narrative, it would look better, (strictly personal opinion) , otherwise, some phrases are extraordinary, it seems to me that you gear up your tone, then and then, slow down fast.. however, enjoyed the poem...
You are going to leave your mark, as you explore life in all it's wonder as you learn, look and listen to the sounds and colours all around, as you allow your star to shine! Beautiful write!
Happy to see you emerge glorious with new resolutions for the coming year! May you wield your powerful weapon and ink timeless poems to your glory and the joy of others! No adversity can douse a determined spirit! Shahzia, may 2014 be one of glorious achievements and abiding cheer for you! All Best Wishes! !
I am amazed looking at the poet's notes! ! Well..if my random scribbles (That too, My 2013 being totally unrelated to your 2014) inspires in literary terms and otherwise, a legend like you in becoming a world known poet/artist, I'm more than satisfied and humbled. That day, just like a matchstick which was used to light an ever enduring blazing flame, I'd be happy to realize that my purpose was served. I wish all the success to you in your endeavors, or rather let me put it this way, battles. World has always respected those who show that undying spirit to stand up and fight. Charge ahead, whether it is one or a thousand people in front of you. Fight for you. Then you can be the change you want to be. As always, an excellent write Shahzia Ma'am!
The images used in the poem are attractive and takes in the word of imagination. May this new year come true all the dreams
If only we are gods...we can make life perfect! Nice imaginary!
very well. may you shine. ameen. i see here, life, pure life. life has wishes, hopes, dreams, aims. life is a great gift and responsibility.
shame on those stars for being so picky. i especially enjoyed reading and considering, ever so briefly, the lines: steal the shades from the rainbow stripes, the colored band, and make them the ink for my new poems; ............that should be interesting! but leave a little color in the sky for the rest of us to enjoy, please! yes, stay safe....if possible. thanks for sharing. :) bri
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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A well composed, thoughtful, optimistically positive and a poem full of hope. I have nothing more to say but AMEN