Vaibhav Pandey

A Beautiful Child

A beautiful child, she was, in her wishful days,
shining like a star despite her impoverished state,
wearing a beautiful expression on her innocent face,
and came towards me with a smile so innate.

'Please give me a penny ', so softly she said.
Saying no to her could have broken her heart instead.
Avoiding such mistake, I gave the penny, the only one I had.
' What would you do with it? ', I asked her with some interest.

' I will buy a car ', in her naivety she replied.
Just a single penny, for her car, on what she had relied.
Left me wondering, she whiskered away, with a sweet imprint on my mind.
Ah! What a beautiful child she was, only one of her kind!

Poem Submitted: Thursday, February 12, 2009
Poem Edited: Monday, July 20, 2009

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  • Ritty Patnaik (7/27/2009 3:15:00 PM)

    very touching incident that has inspired you to write such a lovely poem.
    vaibhav, some little things happens in our daily life which leaves a mark forever.good write, keep it up.

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  • Shashendra Amalshan (5/28/2009 11:26:00 PM)

    that's a nice story indeed..I liked such a narrative ones..enjoyed it very much..moving and touching10++

    regards
    shan











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  • d arm (4/10/2009 1:29:00 PM)

    soft chuckle, nice perception of a poor child!

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  • Sandhya S N (3/10/2009 8:16:00 AM)

    Sure, She is very beautiful. I agreed.
    Keep writing more

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  • Carl Harris (2/26/2009 1:03:00 PM)

    This is a well expressed poem, Vaibhav, and from the length of several lines, I can tell it was one of your earliest efforts. When writing poems in verses, it is not effective to have one or two lines of extreme length like was done in your final verse inparticular. It is preferred to have lines of roughly a similar length, though they do not have to be excactly the same length. This is were the delicate art of editing and rewriting comes in. In your longer lines, you should try finding shorter words to use, or to delet which words are not necessary, or simply re-phrase the line to be shorter. You will learn all of this in due time, but for an early effort, I am impressed with how this poem is expressed. Carl.

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  • James Nall (2/24/2009 6:55:00 PM)

    A very beautifully written piece, my friend.
    its definetly worth my rating of 10
    words put down with such feeling
    tends to send my heart reeling!

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  • Eddie Roa (2/22/2009 7:47:00 PM)

    A nice thought. In a child's eye a penny can buy dreams.

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  • Barry A. LanierBarry A. Lanier (2/22/2009 4:03:00 PM)

    Such a poigant illustration of the beauty of innocence and youth, , , , seeing this picture reminded me of when I wrote 'Little Boy On The Bench' and 'Daughter'....

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  • Jim Norausky (2/20/2009 11:47:00 PM)

    Beautiful heartfelt poem. Please keep writing. Jim

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  • Dr.subhendu KarDr.subhendu Kar (2/18/2009 3:34:00 PM)

    yet the cry of innocence on the corridor of poverty
    tears may glean to eyes as she begs for a penny to buy her dream, wonderful write heart touching, wellpenned,10+++++, thanks for sharing

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  • Meggie GultianoMeggie Gultiano (2/17/2009 8:23:00 PM)

    You are also beautiful inside. You give that child happines, if only for one day.
    Your being generous will one day be blessed.How blessed i am to have you as one of my friend.Shalom!
    Hugs,
    Meggie

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  • Andrew BlakemoreAndrew Blakemore (2/16/2009 4:14:00 PM)

    A really lovely piece Vaibhav, a touching write. Best wishes, Andrew

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  • Moushumi moushumi (2/16/2009 9:19:00 AM)

    The feeling is truly worth writing. Immense understanding both with the poet & his thought...10+

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  • Rajaram RamachandranRajaram Ramachandran (2/14/2009 8:11:00 PM)

    The feelings of the child have been expressed beautifully in the poem.

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  • Sathyanarayana M V SSathyanarayana M V S (2/14/2009 9:24:00 AM)

    The beauty of innocence; the beauty of tender hopes; the aspirations of downtrodden; all in one in this beautifully worded poem

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  • Seema Aarella (2/14/2009 1:57:00 AM)

    The true beauty of that child is her innocence and indifferent mind....they are no wonder referred to flowers, a very touching write....!

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  • C.R. ClarkC.R. Clark (2/13/2009 6:36:00 PM)

    A beautiful moment captured in verse. Well done my friend, well done indeed. A 10.
    Best wishes
    Richard

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  • Louis RamsLouis Rams (2/13/2009 4:47:00 PM)

    she received a penny for 'your thoughts'
    and not in reverse.

    very good write

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  • Tom Golding (2/13/2009 1:21:00 PM)

    Well expressed oft the naivety of childhood.

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  • Ted Sheridan (2/13/2009 1:20:00 PM)

    Can she get us the same deal on that car? Very nicely done.

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