A Stranded Girl On A Friday Night Poem by Uriah Hamilton

A Stranded Girl On A Friday Night

Rating: 4.3

She was weeping when we met
Outside a party store
Where the lonely purchase their wine;
Her boyfriend had left her behind
All sad and lost after a fight,
Most likely, about inconsequential things.

I picked her up, half out of human kindness,
Half to be beside a female body
Despite how red and unhappy her face.
She was a beautiful girl in a simple way,
She wore a plain flowery dress
With some charming appeal I can’t explain.

She tried to express in broken sentences
Why she and her boyfriend were upset;
I mostly heard tears and my boyfriend this,
My boyfriend that,
I tried to act like it was as completely earth shattering
As she thought it was.

She gave me directions to where she lived,
I drove diligently toward that destination
Without any attempts to prolong the drive
While I planned out my own strategy of a pass.

When I finally arrived at her place,
Her face was still red but the tears had dried.
She said, “Thanks, mister, you’re a nice guy.”
She got a little closer to me and touched my hand.
I thought she might kiss me, I thought I might kiss her,
But she scooted on out and made for her house.
I wasn’t expecting any action that night,
I can’t claim disappointment.

But I wish I knew if I should pray
For her and her boyfriend to work things out.

Mountain Man 18 March 2017

Well written poem there. A story in it self...

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Kim Barney 21 April 2015

Enjoyable. Well written. I actually read this some time ago and tried to leave a comment then but the system wouldn't take it for some reason.

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Ebone' Ingram 02 September 2006

It's like, you want them to be happy, but you want your chance with her too...I feel you on that one. It's a very sentimental piece. nice read eni da kid

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Cj Heck 19 October 2005

Uriah, I love your work - you're a romantic, for sure, and write with a gentle and tender spirit. It's a pleasure to read you and I'll watch for more. Warmest regards, CJ

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Daniel Partlow 22 April 2007

I would... Yes definitely. She obviously loved him - don't seek to come between them. Anyway good write. I write (somewhat more directly) about this topic in 'To Abstain - Or Get Married (The Case for Both) ' but my best work is Sunrise On The Mount. Cheers.

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Fredrick Nemes 13 November 2019

My heart still beats for her, I keep passing by her home, Taking the same road every day and night, Hoping to see her once more, hold her hand once more. Nice poem Uriah, , , , , , A piece of reality i once experienced.

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Bryony Sheldon 02 November 2018

Brilliant and beautiful poem.

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Bri Edwards 14 July 2018

(cont.) ....to MyPoemList, and i should read another. bri :) ('you' really hope they stay parted and YOU and she get together! !)

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Bri Edwards 14 July 2018

i very much enjoyed this story/poem. i understood it, which i can't say about some others on PH! and the English seems 'perfect'. [otherwise, i'd probably tell you it 'ain't'! ] as for should or should not pray: what could it hurt? after all, don't all prayers get answered to benefit all BELIEVERS, of which i no longer consider myself one. (?) i've thrown my brand of humor at ya there. (cont.)

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Ash Frost 26 March 2017

story at good end of love Awesome

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