Uriah Hamilton


A Stranded Girl On A Friday Night

Poem by Uriah Hamilton

She was weeping when we met
Outside a party store
Where the lonely purchase their wine;
Her boyfriend had left her behind
All sad and lost after a fight,
Most likely, about inconsequential things.

I picked her up, half out of human kindness,
Half to be beside a female body
Despite how red and unhappy her face.
She was a beautiful girl in a simple way,
She wore a plain flowery dress
With some charming appeal I can’t explain.

She tried to express in broken sentences
Why she and her boyfriend were upset;
I mostly heard tears and my boyfriend this,
My boyfriend that,
I tried to act like it was as completely earth shattering
As she thought it was.

She gave me directions to where she lived,
I drove diligently toward that destination
Without any attempts to prolong the drive
While I planned out my own strategy of a pass.

When I finally arrived at her place,
Her face was still red but the tears had dried.
She said, “Thanks, mister, you’re a nice guy.”
She got a little closer to me and touched my hand.
I thought she might kiss me, I thought I might kiss her,
But she scooted on out and made for her house.
I wasn’t expecting any action that night,
I can’t claim disappointment.

But I wish I knew if I should pray
For her and her boyfriend to work things out.


Comments about A Stranded Girl On A Friday Night by Uriah Hamilton

  • Fredrick NemesFredrick Nemes (11/13/2019 8:12:00 AM)

    My heart still beats for her,
    I keep passing by her home,
    Taking the same road every day and night,
    Hoping to see her once more, hold her hand once more.

    Nice poem Uriah, , , , , , A piece of reality i once experienced.(Report)Reply

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  • Bryony SheldonBryony Sheldon (11/2/2018 1:34:00 PM)

    Brilliant and beautiful poem.(Report)Reply

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  • Bri EdwardsBri Edwards (7/14/2018 5:43:00 PM)

    (cont.) ....to MyPoemList, and i should read another. bri :) ('you' really hope they stay parted and YOU and she get together! !)(Report)Reply

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  • Bri EdwardsBri Edwards (7/14/2018 5:43:00 PM)

    i very much enjoyed this story/poem. i understood it, which i can't say about some others on PH! and the English seems 'perfect'. [otherwise, i'd probably tell you it 'ain't'! ]
    as for should or should not pray: what could it hurt? after all, don't all prayers get answered to benefit all BELIEVERS, of which i no longer consider myself one. (?) i've thrown my brand of humor at ya there. (cont.)(Report)Reply

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  • Ash FrostAsh Frost (3/26/2017 9:21:00 AM)

    story at good end of love
    Awesome(Report)Reply

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  • Loppo LouieLoppo Louie (3/18/2017 12:28:00 PM)

    Well written poem there.
    A story in it self...(Report)Reply

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  • Kim BarneyKim Barney (4/21/2015 4:36:00 PM)

    Enjoyable. Well written. I actually read this some time ago and tried to leave a comment then but the system wouldn't take it for some reason.(Report)Reply

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  • Daniel PartlowDaniel Partlow (4/22/2007 9:51:00 PM)

    I would... Yes definitely. She obviously loved him - don't seek to come between them. Anyway good write. I write (somewhat more directly) about this topic in 'To Abstain - Or Get Married (The Case for Both) ' but my best work is Sunrise On The Mount. Cheers.(Report)Reply

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  • Dee Daffodil (2/3/2007 8:27:00 PM)

    Wow! ! I am always amazed when I discover a poet who pieces I haven't read before...and they are soooooooooooooooooooooooo good! !
    It's like discovering a Christmas present forgotten behind the tree when you take it down!
    Hugs,
    Dee(Report)Reply

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  • Ebone' Ingram (9/2/2006 12:28:00 PM)

    It's like, you want them to be happy, but you want your chance with her too...I feel you on that one. It's a very sentimental piece. nice read

    eni da kid(Report)Reply

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  • Shannon Chapel (12/29/2005 8:58:00 PM)

    Brilliant! I love your gentle style. You have a great gift. Thanks for sharing.

    S(Report)Reply

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  • Declan McHenry (12/7/2005 5:22:00 PM)

    This is an excellent read. I particularly like the way you've handled the ambiguity of the narrator's intentions.(Report)Reply

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  • Cj HeckCj Heck (10/19/2005 5:27:00 PM)

    Uriah, I love your work - you're a romantic, for sure, and write with a gentle and tender spirit. It's a pleasure to read you and I'll watch for more.
    Warmest regards,
    CJ(Report)Reply

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  • Marcy Jarvis (9/23/2005 9:49:00 AM)

    yes, this strikes me, too, Uriah. I love your story telling poems and you still have the best bio I've read here. :)(Report)Reply

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  • Ryan Frazier (6/1/2005 1:09:00 PM)

    Absolutely amazing. Your work is incredible.(Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, May 27, 2005