duncan wyllie

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Chocolates And Tears And Crazy Years - Poem by duncan wyllie

What about tonight I said?
The big box in the window
My mum is short on money again
I feel that it's a sin though

We'll go tonight,
Stand outside shops
You’re on guard
Incase of cops

I burst through the door
Elderly couple, surprise
Fall from step what a blunder
Grab the box noise like thunder

Turn to see if couples gaining
Disbelief, faces remaining
Turn handle wrong way
Fight with it until I stray

Where's my school friend lookout
Half way up the hill
Wait for me I start to shout
Couple, still at till

We ran and ran, fools us both, up hill
Regret and relief set in
My Mothers Birthday tomorrow
Regret and relief turn to sorrow

Next morning I awake
To see mum eat evidence
How could you afford such a gift?
I feel it’s far from providence

Oh if I could turn back the clock
And tell that boy 'No Way'
Or teach about a conscience
That might keep him from going astray.


Comments about Chocolates And Tears And Crazy Years by duncan wyllie

  • (7/19/2012 3:05:00 PM)

    gorgeous, made me see a Hovis lad sneaking through the shop door, a bitter sweet write tyvm...karen (Report)Reply

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  • David Gerardino (2/17/2012 12:47:00 PM)

    very good, dungan, i can see your words........................ (Report)Reply

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  • Andrew Blakemore (7/30/2009 4:31:00 PM)

    A great write Duncan, a wonderful story containing a moral message. We all know that it's wrong to steal and yet this case is tempered by the fact that he did it out of love for his mother. Best wishes, Andrew (Report)Reply

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  • Cindy Kreiner Sera (6/1/2009 4:58:00 AM)

    A wonderful write Duncan - it was done for the right reason not self gain - you did pay a price - fear! Mum enjoyed her gift - I would forgive you (Report)Reply

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  • (3/30/2009 2:26:00 AM)

    I like your poem, when we are young, we make our mistakes even when we are old we make our mistakes, but at least when we are young we have an excuse lol. Your poem took me to when i was a child, my bro and i would get in trouble and he would stay away from my mom all day till she forgot, i would just go in and take my punishment so i could enjoy the rest of my day lol. :) very well done, thank you for sharing. (Report)Reply

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  • Brian Dorn (11/13/2006 12:25:00 PM)

    An intriguing tale of moral dilema and internal conflict... it certainly makes you think? It may be looked back on with regret, but at the time, a loving (though illegal) gesture. Certainly forgivable, I'd say. Great write, Duncan!
    Brian
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  • (2/14/2006 10:13:00 PM)

    Great reminder of my youth.
    Especially Valentines day, as I used to raid Mom tripple decker box of Choclates that Dad used to buy her, than I would rearrange the remainder to show that nothing missing. until the box was low on treats than harder to disguise. Dad and Mom, long gone but never forgoten on Valentines Day.
    Charles Garcia
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  • (2/12/2006 6:16:00 AM)

    such a endearing poem.. not because you stole something but because you knew on your own that it was the wrong thing to do even if it was shown to be for a noble cause.. Well done!
    HBH
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  • (2/12/2006 3:34:00 AM)

    What breath-taking candour! (Report)Reply

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  • (2/2/2006 10:05:00 AM)

    Another 'not-a-single-glance-away' write. And I just love the title. Kind regards, Gina. (Report)Reply

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  • Ernestine Northover (1/31/2006 3:32:00 PM)

    A criminal mind Eh! ! ! A great story from way back, and one that sticks in the mind for a very long time. Nifty poem. Love Ernestine XXX (Report)Reply

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  • (1/30/2006 8:15:00 PM)

    Duncan,
    It was the title that caught my eye (it's fabulous, by the way) , but the tale itself is what held me. This is a great piece of work, Duncan. A 10 from me.

    Shannon
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  • (1/30/2006 6:17:00 PM)

    Aww, I don't know whether you would deserve a hug......or a spankin'. :) This is very sweet Duncan, even though you were stealing, your heart was in the right place. Very nice. Sincerely, mary (Report)Reply

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  • (1/30/2006 5:38:00 PM)

    An introspective from a time where our intentions seem to be correct, however...our minds seem to be on another when the deed is done! I got several images from this, Duncan! I enjoyed reading this.
    L
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  • (1/30/2006 5:10:00 PM)

    a fine poem
    subtle and complicated
    the need to give
    balanced by the urge
    to take
    all done with a smile
    and a bit of wisdom
    to end this wonderful narrative
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Poem Submitted: Monday, January 30, 2006



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