Brian Dorn

Rookie - 5 Points (1965 / United States)

Dark In Me - Poem by Brian Dorn

Welcome to my haunted house
Dare to see the dark in me
Suits of armor wait to joust
Eyes in portraits move to see

Stroke my ego, don't be shy
Give my id his equal pay
Watch the serpent slither by
My alter ego's chance to play

In the dungeon sleeps the creature
Securely cuffed in mounted chains
Disregard his ragged features
Please excuse the carpet stains

Behind the bookcase hides my secrets
Discretion swept up under rugs
The dark in me you haven't met
Struggles loose in warring tugs

Tempting me in carnal pleasure
Rewarding me if I dare
Accolades in grand measure
Disposing me in deep despair


Comments about Dark In Me by Brian Dorn

  • (6/25/2007 6:56:00 AM)


    an honest word on human nature............well done. (Report) Reply

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  • (4/23/2007 7:21:00 AM)


    I love this one and without any hesitation am adding it as my favourite (Report) Reply

  • (3/12/2007 9:33:00 PM)


    one of my favourites i love it (Report) Reply

  • (2/15/2007 3:28:00 PM)


    There's a likeness to a snake, representing 'The bad in me' Image apon image, speaks of the dark corners, the sinister side. A bit Edgar Allan Po well done again
    Would need a copy to say more, but certainly found rich imagery here


    Daphne G
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  • (2/10/2007 12:39:00 AM)


    the dark in you is the dark in me...i love the dark...it is a place that i visit too, because if i dont it haunts me and leads me into dungeons of my mind that i do not want to go.i loved the erotic feel to this poem...could almost see the stains on the carpet..great imagery. (Report) Reply

  • (2/9/2007 2:11:00 PM)


    Someone long ago told me that each and every one of us, has something that we would rather not share with others...that dark side of us... You've been very honest here, and you've done a great job with your poem. Very nicely done Brian! !
    Hugs,
    Dee
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  • (2/7/2007 1:34:00 PM)


    Classical feeling to your writes...
    I enjoy the Freudian inferences..
    John
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  • Melvina Germain (2/7/2007 5:10:00 AM)


    I too believe everyone has skeletons in their closet, therefore everyone has a dark side. Excellent poem, I enjoyed the read Brian.---Melvina--- (Report) Reply

  • (2/5/2007 5:06:00 AM)


    I loved this poem, dark, mysterious and exciting! Everyone has a dark side!
    CJ
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  • (2/1/2007 8:45:00 AM)


    Stumbled upon this poem and I'm glad I did. Very nice. I love the fact that it's talking about a persons other side, and secrets. Everyone has skeletons in their closets, but hardly any admit it.
    ~Linley~
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  • (1/29/2007 3:26:00 PM)


    We've all got some of this stuff concealed as well as we can from the world at large. Brave and challenging write. Inspiring reading as always. (Report) Reply

  • (1/26/2007 11:47:00 AM)


    Brian:

    Very moving and a bit intimidating.

    Fred
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  • (1/24/2007 6:00:00 PM)


    Wow this is my first read of this! It so aptly describes the dark side that resides in us! ! It's amazing Brian Karen xx (Report) Reply

  • (1/15/2007 3:27:00 PM)


    Richest of metaphors offered in direct language. Pure magic. (Report) Reply

  • (12/7/2006 10:23:00 AM)


    An eloquent and impressive poem full of clever metaphors. Quite a mediaeval feeling to the content...and dark for sure :)
    jack.
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  • (11/25/2006 1:27:00 AM)


    A-ha! so this is where the treasure is buried. Great, provocative piece, Brian. I loved the line about bookcase that hides your secrets - what we read tells so much about who we are, doesn't it. (Report) Reply

  • (11/17/2006 6:22:00 PM)


    I love your poetry, this poem in particular.

    'The dark in me you haven't met
    Struggles loose in warring tugs'

    That phrase hit me way too close for comfort, but then, good poetrys not supposed to make you feel 'comfortable, ' is it?
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  • Melvina Germain (11/11/2006 2:32:00 PM)


    Very creative poem Brian, bringer the reader into the poem, intense, wonderful. Thankyou Brian---Melvina---- (Report) Reply

  • (10/11/2006 8:37:00 AM)


    Brian,
    Hello, I know it's been a while, but I just read this and thought you were talking about my house! haha Truly though, this is a fabulous poem. I love the pronounciation of the dark ages blended with today. Good one! Frank
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  • (10/5/2006 11:06:00 PM)


    Brian, this is absolutely one of my favourites... (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, March 26, 2006



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