we are living today
to die another day
what is the point of living
if your heart will decay
you are given time
of a night and a day
to roam the earth
and on it to stay
while death with a yellow smile
is looking for a way
to slaughter your soul
and take it away
****
while the day is getting less young
your soul is fading and ure becoming weaker
and while the night is aging
you become more terrified of the black seeker
***
don`t try to run don`t try to hide
wherever you look death is in that side
if you go to the moon or underground
somehow, be sure, you will be found
and when you are caught and cannot escape
you can only at him astonished gape
Very vivid and descriptive. You write with much creative energy. Though I must say that I have a very different concept of death. To me, it is closing one's eyes in one world and waking up in another.Wishing you a very happy and productive 2009. Kindest regards, Sandra
I certainly got your point in the poem that no matter who we are we get checked out eventually. I sometimes look at important people (or those who think they are) knowing it will end for them as well as me. However, I do think we should life with compassion for others and enjoy the gift of life we have been given. You expressed your opinion strongly in this piece and the writing is unique so thank you Blue Eyes......Karin Anderson
The secret my young boy, is enjoy very much our life. Because where life is, death is not.
'somehow, be sure, you will be found' wow, this is just amazing, I loved the idea, the words and the way you expressed yourself. Your tone is sad and heartbreaking yet very convincing; it's a poem every one can and should relate to. After all we can't 'escape' death but we can seiz the moment and be the children of 'today'. Great job from such a great poet
A beautiful poem indeed, well penned, brooding is ever opening the doors of perception. Good luck!
Death, ahhh I now deep, dark and scary for many. For me, not scary at all, I see death in a different light, I see it as a beginning of a new life, an eternal life, leaving the testing grounds to go beyond and into a life of peace and freedom, a tranquil paradise. I see no fear in death only beauty of moving on. I was so blessed to be present at the death of my husband and what took place was so absolutely beautifu, if I had fear then all fear was removed then, and I thank God for showing me that peace. You wrote a very good poerm here, thankyou once again. (10)
This poem sounds musical and full of meaning. It is evocative because it points out something inevitable.
I really had a really wonderful interest while I was reading your poem..... well simply it is very fantastic...... full of meanings and emotions..... great poem it is really worth reading..... telling about the fact that no one could ever run away from it.... taking you to better or worse second ever lasting life.... thanks for sharing and keep it up..... Diana
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
words of truth and wisdom...good rhyming...the first stanza lines i liked most...good piece...10