fatherless child,
rainy days and no smile,
fatherless child,
filled with tribulations and trial,
fatherless child,
always running wild,
fatherless child,
i know one day you will smile.
01/02/2009
Copyright ©2009 Jose Murguia
I loved the positivity in the lines: fatherless child, i know one day you will smile. CP
thats reli good. i completely understand what your going thro and it makes the poem seem like its coming from somewhere dep in my head which i normally try to forget about. thats a reli deep poem. wel done :)
An economy of words heightens the impact of this touching write.
Endearing childlike simplicity in the phrasing. Well done.
With a format like this, It is easy to do too much. You did a great job with succint phrasing. =]
that was a great poem..i liked it alot..and the poem just flowed very nicely
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Simple but effective in getting your message across