Sameer Ahmed

Rookie (08/17/1986 / Pakistan)

First Beautiful Rain - Poem by Sameer Ahmed

I could see from the window
Light losing it's consciousness
With fading sunshine.
The green cheering rhythmically
Along the gentle breeze
And waiting eagerly
To enjoy freedom from the dirt.
Black and white fluffy giant-like clouds
Taking control over the sky
Murmuring and murmuring.....
My words invited them
For a chit-chat.
With a timely manner
By waving wind's banner
They showed their gesture
With a divinely vertical texture
And sprayed a colourless stain
Since I started writing
It was the first beautiful rain!




(12/20/2008)


Comments about First Beautiful Rain by Sameer Ahmed

  • Matt Mooney (8/6/2009 12:55:00 PM)

    What a complete and beautiful poem! Happy to read you. Keep in touch. (Report)Reply

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  • (7/10/2009 1:45:00 AM)

    sweet write... refreshing just like rain.... :) (Report)Reply

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  • Cynthia Buhain-baello (7/7/2009 2:20:00 AM)

    Eloquent, soothing, and refreshing like the rain. Very nice Sameer. (Report)Reply

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  • (6/24/2009 1:35:00 AM)

    i very much enjoyed this poem. thank you for inviting me to read it and comment.
    since you did and since there are so few that are as well written as this and that a few simple things i feel would make it even more lovely, i take the permission to say, eliminate 'like' in poetry use the words to say what it is or is not, try to use as few 'THE' 'a' 'and' as possible and still keep the meaning and rythm
    i would have written, eagerly awaiting freedom from dirt! '
    i invite you to read and comment on my new powm i ran. thank you again. good luck,
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  • Ashraful Musaddeq (6/21/2009 8:41:00 PM)

    Very lovely poem. (Report)Reply

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  • (6/10/2009 9:54:00 AM)

    I found this wonderful nature poem on your list. It is so beautiful. I will review and enjoy more of your work as time permits.... J.L. (Report)Reply

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  • (6/9/2009 7:18:00 AM)

    This poem about rain makes me feel cleam on the inside. Just a beautiful rythm about the whole entire thing. (Report)Reply

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  • (6/8/2009 2:49:00 AM)

    Beautiful poem.. i can imagine whtever u have written! (Report)Reply

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  • (6/8/2009 2:48:00 AM)

    Beautiful poem.. i can imagine whtever u have written! (Report)Reply

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  • (6/6/2009 6:32:00 AM)

    Lovely poem, rain brings us water the very essence of life. (Report)Reply

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  • (4/27/2009 6:47:00 AM)

    A beautiful poem, Sameer, combines so well with rain I am observing right now from the window.Very well crafted.Thank you.10+
    Best wishes.
    A.
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  • (3/20/2009 10:09:00 AM)

    Excellent - I'm sitting here in 30+ celcius, and would really welcome that 'first rain'. N (Report)Reply

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  • (3/19/2009 11:19:00 AM)

    You are a great writer and this is evidence.the connection is strong throughout.thanks for sharing.
    Peya
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  • (3/15/2009 7:40:00 PM)

    Well written, you can actually imagine it happening, i actually like the rain so i like this alot! (Report)Reply

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  • (3/14/2009 12:32:00 PM)

    Nice poem well done(a ten) I liked it so much, if you can read my poems (Report)Reply

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  • (3/11/2009 7:02:00 AM)

    I love this imagry
    Its lovely
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  • (1/21/2009 2:06:00 AM)

    Well written. There is much passion and emotion in this and enhances the imagery you have painted with your words of the first rain. It is simple in its presentation and yet it holds a picture so wide and vast that it seems to encompass the world in its own cocoon. Well done. I enjoyed the read. Many blessings to you (Report)Reply

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  • (1/19/2009 6:34:00 PM)

    a very touching poem... it brings peace to the heart.. well done! ten for this! (Report)Reply

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  • (1/18/2009 11:48:00 AM)

    Figuratively also it is melodious/10 (Report)Reply

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  • (1/18/2009 1:33:00 AM)

    Poeticaly versed! well done! (Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Saturday, December 20, 2008

Poem Edited: Saturday, April 18, 2009


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