Living Fake Poem by kanav justa
Living Fake
Of the deepest sorrow
Of every dollar that I borrowed
To the stars I take a vow
But but let me ask you now
What's wrong with an old shirt
and a bed sheet with some dirt.
Or a pillow that is elsewhere from its place
Or a filthy dry face
Scent of a socks that is old
some yellow stain that remind us of gold
And the holy waterfall, leaking from the tap
And the sound from a stomach that raps
Why should I appear to be clean
Dress up well and look a little mean
And then again I look at some star
To ask, , Why can't we be who we are?
Why can't we be who we are?
i do like this one even though i don't get the first three lines or their connection to the whole. also, mention of the waterfall didn't seem to go with the apparent theme of a person being themselves in appearance of body or cloth. i would also take one but out of the fourth line and remove a from in front of socks. in talking of socks i would say socks or a pair of socks, but the custom may be otherwise in other places (i'm in california) . and two suggestions if one wishes the rhyming to be more exact in sound: 1- change borrowed to did borrow 2- change raps to does rap i DO like the question being repeated at the end! CAUTION: i do feel people can be themselves as long as they accept the consequences. in the case of dirtiness and/or messiness the consequences could be less favorable attitudes from prospective or present employers, friends, or partners etc. sometimes my wife says i look like a homeless person because of the way i dress; i sometimes wear a shirt with a little stain or a few small holes in it. but because of others' sensitivities i try to not look or smell TOO dirty or unkempt. thanks for sharing kanav. bri
I like the thinking behind this one. It's a lesson on the bare essentials and the dangers of taking the book by the cover. A genuine poetic outburst which is refreshing.10.
Dear Kanav, I really love the angle of your thinking and the way you embrace it into a beautiful poetry. Deep to understand but real. Keep up.
A very interesting write that make us think your thoughts from new perspective. Hope to see some of your fresh works very soon.
A very interesting write that make us think your thoughts from new perspective. Hope to see some of your fresh works very soon.
Yes I am so with you. Just why? Such a truly beautiful write Kanav. No new words from you. I Hope your sun is shining.
It is always commendable to accept ourselves as we are! But we have to be clean in appearance for our sake and for others sake! A neat appearance is preferred to an unkempt appearance. At the same time there is no need to be showy or extravagant about our dress or possessions just to impress others! A very practical view of life, different from that of ordinary youngsters!
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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12/5/2025 12:54:21 AM # 1.0.0
To ask, , Why can't we be who we are? Why can't we be who we are? ... love these verses... well written indeed...