Unwritten Soul

Lost From Your Grasp - Poem by Unwritten Soul

Remember me?
In your promise
A little warm castle
Made of sweet time
Built for me to live
Between your hands
And i forever at the center
Protected as long as i still here
Remember those promise dear?

I know that it maybe NO,
But i still thankful
I was just the snowy ice
That never felt so warm before
And you shared me once to let me know
Changed, melted my soul as the water flow
Through your loosen fingers like the opened windows
You let me go
Gone and disappeared
Stolen by the cold air
By the ropes of sunlight hair

Remember you?
How cant I?
Because I promised once
Even though I've been forgotten
I still around you to support anytime
And when clouds sending me back, i returned
Fallen and buried underneath your garden

I know that you maybe don't know
The flowers in your jars that bloom
Because of me give my life into them
Water, my strength in them
So you still have me
Your eyes can't see me
But i am here
Though the last promise
Have been forgotten
And I still here

Just I cant be yours
To live in your grasp
Just not as what in your promise
But here i am again

Poet's Notes about The Poem

Just doodling words and the image of ice-water-air came in..and i composed it as a story where a hand once promise to take care snow and never let go but it never a good happy ending...its like we should not take something for granted...and for us, no matter we are having a broken promises, sending prayers for all person and forgive from all past make things still alive in beautiful. Just want to live in harmony...so that's what i got after doodling the words randomly...hahahah dont laugh okay hahaha_Soul

Comments about Lost From Your Grasp by Unwritten Soul

  • (7/6/2017 12:01:00 AM)

    This poem has a remarkable quality. There is a suggestion that a relationship of a lifetime can slowly fall away from the grasp....like a fistful of sand. The tighter we hold and cling, the more is lost. Simply doing nothing will not prevent the drift, but it can slow it down. In time, all is lost. What remains is the memory....which is so unlike those grains of sand. A remarkable poem, Soul. (Report) Reply

    Unwritten Soul (7/9/2017 6:42:00 AM)

    Your kindness and sweetness really a great gift i ever have from friends. Thank you :)

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  • Simone Inez Harriman (2/6/2016 1:21:00 AM)

    I love your choice of words...

    'Remember me?
    In your promise
    A little warm castle
    Made of sweet time
    Built for me to live
    Between your hands'

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  • (8/28/2013 7:15:00 PM)

    beautiful poetry... still searching for myself to be able to do so.... nice to read in others words to describe oneself feels... emotions are universal.... (Report) Reply

  • Heather Wilkins (8/26/2013 9:03:00 PM)

    beautiful write enjoyed the read (Report) Reply

  • Diane Hine (8/19/2013 8:34:00 PM)

    Brilliant analogy, one of your best. (Report) Reply

  • Paul Brookes (8/17/2013 3:56:00 AM)

    Ah forgiveness no easy task I sometimes struggle with the concept especially those who have betrayed but you're right, does no good to hold a grudge it only poisons from within Enjoy your poem as always BB : O) (Report) Reply

  • Heather Wilkins (8/14/2013 5:42:00 PM)

    forgiveness is one of the keys to life it does no good to hold on to grudges. they just make for unhappy people. better to let it go and forget. enjoyed (Report) Reply

  • (8/14/2013 5:21:00 PM)

    I enjoy your poet notes as much as the poem, I think. Interesting to see how a mind
    arrives at that certain point and what then comes from the muse.. :)
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  • Valerie Dohren (8/14/2013 3:25:00 PM)

    It has been said that 'to err is human, to forgive, divine' - beautiful Soul, great sentiment. (Report) Reply

  • (8/14/2013 11:19:00 AM)

    good poem soul. we enjoy yr poetry (Report) Reply

  • Lucifera Santez (8/14/2013 10:00:00 AM)

    its phnomenol, a 10 for it.
    loved reading it.
    But here i am again
    amazing lines.
    please read some of mine.
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  • (8/14/2013 9:27:00 AM)

    Wow! .. This poem is superb my friend, it melts the heart of the reader.
    Siya_! !
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  • Geetha Jayakumar (8/14/2013 8:51:00 AM)

    Beautiful poem with a great message to forgive...Loved reading each lines....Loved it. (Report) Reply

  • Khairul Ahsan (8/14/2013 7:48:00 AM)

    A beautiful poem has come out from your 'doodling' of words and thoughts. The theme is nice. The message of unconditional forgiveness is great! Hands that water the plants may not be there, but the plants do gratefully remember the favour. This part touched me. When my wife is away from home, I look at the plants and wonder how much care she took of them to keep them alive!
    Great to see so many comments here. I applaud each and everyone of them for sharing their nice thoughts.
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  • Neela Nath Das (8/13/2013 8:55:00 PM)

    One story ends, another begins.It happens.Love, love, love very much the tune beneath the words. (Report) Reply

  • (8/13/2013 11:19:00 AM)

    Tender... evokative... very nice, Soul... Terry (and thank you for your kind comments and suggestion... I agree, but unfortunately am no artist) (Report) Reply

  • Shereen Ramadan (8/13/2013 10:28:00 AM)

    nice poem and the images are just perfect: D (Report) Reply

  • Hazel Durham (8/13/2013 5:53:00 AM)

    Beautiful story written with such deep emotions, beautifully expressed and a great message to always forgive! (Report) Reply

  • S.zaynab Kamoonpuri (8/12/2013 11:23:00 PM)

    One of your best and even a lil soulful but a 10 out of 1o for the poetic lyrical tones. Tc. :) (Report) Reply

  • Vivek Tiwari (8/12/2013 7:48:00 PM)

    The imagination is superb.
    The ice v/s warmth in the life of ice.
    The feelings are pathetic but the idea is superb.
    Loved it greatly
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Poem Submitted: Monday, August 12, 2013

Poem Edited: Tuesday, August 27, 2013

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