Silentpoet Grl

My Mind - Poem by Silentpoet Grl

my mind is like a loaded gun
pressure is building, ticking
a final act pushes the limit
breaking me even further down
tormented, gnashing thoughts
loudly battle the dark demons
secrets caged, locked tightly in
searching, aching for any relief,
grasping at holding it together
trigger pulled creating new chaos
beautiful pain sends demons fleeing,
blood spilling as thoughts escape
silenced, my mind finds release.

Comments about My Mind by Silentpoet Grl

  • (1/6/2012 5:59:00 PM)

    * Forgiveness for your self (Report) Reply

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  • (1/6/2012 5:57:00 PM)

    Forgiveness will make the demons flee. (Report) Reply

  • (1/6/2012 5:52:00 PM)

    Very deep write, well done!
    Relief is in living your best, loving your self. Not putting up with anyone trespassing against you in life.
    Don't allow anyone to control you, always think good of yourself, that's really the best revenge.
    Sincerely, Kara
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  • (1/5/2012 4:36:00 PM)

    When one releases pain in words, one releases some of the pain inside the soul...please keep writing and releasing the demons with your (Report) Reply

  • (12/31/2011 4:15:00 PM)

    thats nice, , , keep it up (Report) Reply

  • (12/29/2011 6:38:00 PM)

    find the stillness beneath the roar... and out of infinite compassion form your words! you have a great talent, and a sense of raw honesty in your work, to be admired! good poetry! (Report) Reply

  • (12/26/2011 12:09:00 PM)

    I lost two aunts and a grandfather to suicide by gun affliction. I hope you're not contemplating doing the same thing. This poem is well written but was very hard for me to read.
    There was nothing beautiful about the deaths in my family. Pain just begot more pain that through the generations, (starting with my grandfather) destroyed lives. I wrote a poem about my grandfather called I Don't Want To See You Anymore and a couple others that are about suicides.
    I pray you won't think that suicide is a way out, the gnashing of teeth is what awaits on the other side.
    Good write, just worrisome to read for me. Loads of horrible memories, it a terrible thing to do.
    (Report) Reply

  • (12/23/2011 12:29:00 PM)

    I too suffer with the situation described in this immensely emotional write. Seems to run in my family. I felt like you were inside my head. Your rendering is right on.
    Thanks for sharing.
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  • Jacqui Broad (12/23/2011 8:43:00 AM)

    The power of the mind! To write's a great escape. A really great poem... (Report) Reply

  • Kevin East (12/22/2011 6:50:00 AM)

    Tension grips as desperation is revealed.
    So much emotion bound and gagged..but for your pen!
    Ah that beautiful pain.
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  • Romeo Della Valle (12/19/2011 6:06:00 PM)

    Wow! How much I would love to be in your mind and vividly watch this excited show! I really know the feeling when I wrote' A Mind Escape'...10+++ This is a fantastic write well penned! Thank you for sharing! God Bless You! Love and Peace for always! ... (Report) Reply

  • Bulletcookie 2017 (12/19/2011 5:34:00 PM)

    Trigger Grl poet! Nice. Write on... (Report) Reply

  • Robert Roberts (12/18/2011 5:20:00 PM)

    the mind is the only god given weapon to man.........nice one silent girl (Report) Reply

  • Vipins Puthooran (12/18/2011 1:43:00 PM)

    Magnificient write] an amazin' poem! ! (Report) Reply

  • (12/18/2011 7:28:00 AM)

    Wow! this is beautiful Silentpoet.....! (Report) Reply

  • Cosmic Dreamer (12/18/2011 6:29:00 AM)

    There is a rage that lives within us all, the trick is to find a way to release it without causing carnage... Our words are bereft of knowledge when spoken in anger... Beautifully written once more... (Report) Reply

  • (12/17/2011 10:05:00 AM)

    your really a loaded gun thats why you have able to write this wounderful
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  • (12/16/2011 5:23:00 PM)

    A great poem. The mind is a demon in its self.
    A fantastic write.
    May i invite you to read my new poem called,
    Paradox Of Time.
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  • Jonny Brackney (12/16/2011 5:08:00 PM)

    .............i like it. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, December 16, 2011

Poem Edited: Saturday, December 17, 2011

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