** Sanctuary ** Poem by Sulaiman Mohd Yusof

** Sanctuary **

Rating: 4.5

Density of the room
Filled with gloom
Ahead, nothing emerges
The four walls
Witness semen, blood, sweat and tears
The floors suffocate
The bed strains
Groans and moans
Were the past luxury
The exit door is history
Leads to our mortuaries

Confinement eludes
Rejuvenates prelude
One word is enough
To plough
Is the calamity

PS: Get the right mood, tune in to Gary Moore's song 'Empty Room'.It would complete your reading of this poem.

Xera Mclaughlin 02 April 2009

I like it alot, I'm kinda new at poem writing so idk how to use all the big words some of the other ppl use, but i did like your poem.....I hope you liked mine

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John Smith 16 April 2009

It feels as if I sleep in that room every night.

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Richard Vandervoort 26 April 2009

Baffling! I taught modern & contemporary poetry 61-74, was poet-in-residence at two universities, and published about a 100 poems during that period. I valued the Confessional School of poetry especially, and poems whose MEANING was clear, poems about something, something one could relate to. I don't value vagueness in poetry. Also, 'blood sweat & tears' is a tad trite, is it not? But, we don't all like the same kind of poetry.

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This poem is worthy of a biblical page, the Balthazar's feast.

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Amber Lyn Charneski 04 May 2009

Great job! It told so many stories with so few words. I love how it is descriptive enough that to tell the story and it's lack of detail really sets the imagination free. You created this poem flawlessly. I can hardly believe that sure a short poem could inspire me this much. Thank you so much for asking me to read your poem. I love it.

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Jasmine Dugas 13 July 2009

another amazing poem.....its really good and i really liked it

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Kristina B; Williams 11 July 2009

every1 needs theyre personal space and some where to hide and go...pretty darn good..for espressing it so well..10,4 #5

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Jester's P 04 July 2009

Greetings of peace! In my poem “A game- A fall” I portrayed the situation of a friend in front of temptation- and what was the latter.... In my work “Manhood” I relate the reality of being a “man” or let me say the 'part of man's growing”. And in your poem “Sanctuary” some of the words (elements of imagery) presents the truth of many things that would occur to “mans” life...the sanctuary of health, sickness in a deep sense of the word. And of course all sort of things we are frown to fall or to rise. Dear poet, your poem is one of the best...keep the legacy of poetry. Note: take yout time to read my poems I mentioned above. Thank you

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Sulaiman Mohd Yusof 21 June 2009

From: Barbara Sallee (perryville arknasas United States; Female; 43) To: Sulaiman Mohd Yusof Date Time: 6/20/2009 2: 47: 00 PM (GMT -6: 00) Subject: RE: santurary Sulaiman, I just read your poem santuary and what a beautiful write. you are an amazing author and have a true gift! ! ! Barbie

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Subroto Chatterjee 13 June 2009

Sanctuary as in the concentration camps (Second WW?) . Methinks not. That's the grandaddy of nightmares. Devil's sanctuary more likely... Cheers. Subroto

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