Bri Edwards

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' Spider' Is Watching You.... [ A Little Girl's 'pet' Spider; 'cute', Says Valsa G.; Idea From Stephen Katona On Ph] - Poem by Bri Edwards

Little girl, do you feel many eyes watching you each day,
while, in sun or rain, outside you carry on ….at your play?
It's just me, your multi-eyed little pencil-case-spider-friend.
Remember when last year, on playground, me you did defend?

Those boys tormented me until you rescued 'Spider' from poking,
then into your case you slipped me; some thought you were joking,
BUT you faithfully protected me. Then one day, ‘cause the case WAS stuffy,
I crawled out and onto your shoe. Please DON'T think that I was huffy!

Then those mean boys saw me, and told your even-more-mean teacher,
who came up to your seat and said: 'You must REMOVE that creature …
from my classroom and from this, your place of academic learning! '
So you placed me on a sycamore, and from that day, for you, I'm yearning.

At night I sometimes dream of following you home, but too far I dare not roam,
because now I have a spider family to care for, because you saved my life. Therefore …
I'll always be thankful that you came along in time to save me from those noisy boys,
and I'll think of you when my little girl AND boy spiders are playing..........with their spider toys.

(March 19,2015)

Topic(s) of this poem: childhood


Poet's Notes about The Poem

PH member Stephen Katona wrote 'Spider in my pencil case', about his youngest daughter's life-saving efforts towards a spider. this poem was part of my answer to his GREAT poem.
Thanks Stephen, and thanks, Valsa, for pointing out that i did NOT have it on 'my page' yet!

bri :)

Comments about ' Spider' Is Watching You.... [ A Little Girl's 'pet' Spider; 'cute', Says Valsa G.; Idea From Stephen Katona On Ph] by Bri Edwards

  • Kelly Kurt (3/29/2015 7:34:00 PM)


    I read Stephen's poem and was enchanted. Your sequel is equal in enchantment. Thanks for sharing. (Report) Reply

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  • (3/24/2015 5:19:00 PM)


    Really like this, I've read Stephen's poem, so it's nice to see it inspired another poem, and reading Stephen's response you also made two people very happy. A really great write. (Report) Reply

  • Beach Girl (3/23/2015 6:39:00 AM)


    I wasn't sure I'd like this poem because it was about a spider, but as it turns out I did! I have to say, you conveyed the story in a very heartwarming way from a spider's viewpoint. I always enjoy reading stories on the internet about unusual bonds between animals and humans. Although this is fiction, it wouldn't surprise me if a creature such as this did have some sort of realization of being rescued and appreciations for the fact. I really, really liked this poem Bri! (Report) Reply

  • Valsa George (3/22/2015 8:48:00 AM)


    Yes, let me repeat once again this is such a cute write..... A beautiful sequel to Stephen's interesting poem Spider in My Pencil Box!

    '.......now I have a spider family to care for, because you saved my life. Therefore …
    I’ll always be thankful that you came along in time to save me from those noisy boys,
    and I’ll think of you when my little girl AND boy spiders are playing with their spider toys'.

    You have given a lovely end to the poem! I visualize a happy contented spider mother with her 'brood' of spider children comfortably settled in some safe corner! Top marks!
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  • Amitava Sur (3/21/2015 2:47:00 AM)


    A lovely penning about expressing gratitude to the little girl from the spider who was rescued once, by the little girl.... a lovely story telling. (Report) Reply

  • Stephen Katona (3/20/2015 3:18:00 PM)


    Both I and the little girl are delighted to have heard from her spider friend again. Her eyes were sparkling and she could not stop smiling. She is so happy that her friend has made a fulfilling life for himself. It is more than she ever could have hoped for. Instead of worrying about him she can imagine his spider family and their many antics. Perhaps they too might put pen to paper one day... (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, March 20, 2015

Poem Edited: Sunday, October 16, 2016


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