Siddartha Montik

That Fresh Breath! - Poem by Siddartha Montik

my past is erased,
my present is clipped...
my future camouflaged!

any speck of thought is gripped in fear,
any contemplation ending in suspicion,
I'm not sure of any next second!

ethics shout loud to check my perception,
'not all is as it seem, not all can be at blame! '

my senses seem going berserk....,
indication remained only in utter pain,
burning in every breath and its work,
getting me in such treacherous trauma,
in the end tossing me into an eternal irk!

can't be like this in any of my make-up,
could be the reason lying with no basis,
after all nothing can be beyond the 'karma', the thesis!

no wonder i starve for a fresh breath,
even as hottest but as fresh!

or even my honest compromise,
to get shot in a split second,
to be forged under a sledge-hammer,
to sublimate in a blast-furnace!

all I want is 'that fresh breath'!

copyright © Siddartha Montik (Ramesh Kompella)

Topic(s) of this poem: life

Comments about That Fresh Breath! by Siddartha Montik

  • Siddartha Montik (5/31/2018 12:30:00 AM)

    All I want is thhat Freshest BREATH.. and even now! (Report) Reply

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  • Thabani Khumalo (5/20/2018 8:21:00 AM)

    i want to contact the source of the inspiration, what is it? (Report) Reply

  • Bernard F. Asuncion (12/15/2017 1:01:00 PM)

    Siddartha, such an interesting write👍👍👍 (Report) Reply

  • Damian Cranney (4/26/2017 1:21:00 PM)

    Your message in this poem is communicated well 'fresh breath'. May you always have it but try and avoid the last one. I like your writing, but if possible use the tools we have at our disposal nowadays, spellcheckers grammar checking, rhyme checker etc., enjoy your poems, keep writing. Hope you don't mind the constructive remarks.Best wishes Damian (Report) Reply

  • Besma Dziri (4/20/2017 4:24:00 PM)

    Man is born from the past, thrives in the present and always anxious about the future. The poet needs to live in a world unlike any world, needs to fly high and breathe words. Profound poem. (Report) Reply

  • Ndina Kamaro Muofhe (2/25/2017 4:24:00 AM)

    we are the center of a circle and the circumference of it is drawn by the three(past, present and future) . without one of the three, life has no meaning. brilliant writing Siddartha. (Report) Reply

  • Jeremy Horsford (12/13/2016 10:14:00 AM)

    Striving for hope. (Report) Reply

  • (12/5/2016 2:49:00 AM)

    nice but full of pain...
    a pure breath, I think has no thoughts, and it has no link with past not with future.
    nice poem friend
    (Report) Reply

  • Dimitrios Galanis (11/22/2016 11:14:00 AM)

    my past is erased,
    my present is clipped...
    my future is camouflaged! +IS is not needed here or even further on.///even if it is as hottest but as fresh =The wording here would change to... Make it too shorter...It will be a great poem.
    (Report) Reply

  • (11/21/2016 11:44:00 AM)

    Sometimes life does overwhelm us, our minds not wanting to dwell on the past or present, the future is always a mystery! A negative atmosphere seems to surround us, making us doubt ourselves, we become fearful of the unknown, nothing seems normal and there's no reason to find blame for our situation. When it seems there's no way out, feeling helpless, we only pray for that one tiny moment of reprieve to refresh our outlook, attitude and life. Excellent poem Siddartha. One suggestion perhaps, spell check before posting. Before I post anything, I read it out loud, listening for mistakes with the sound of the rhythm, it helps me to focus and correct what I find immediately. Don't worry if you don't always catch mistakes, it's our human nature. Thank you for sharing. RoseAnn (Report) Reply

  • Edward Kofi Louis (11/18/2016 8:17:00 AM)

    Past, present and future! ! Thanks for sharing this poem with us. (Report) Reply

  • Bill Cantrell (11/16/2016 6:30:00 PM)

    Vivid emotions in quest for fresh air, nice poetry my friend. (Report) Reply

  • (11/14/2016 10:12:00 AM)

    That Fresh Breath
    Very direct and powerful words in wanting that Fresh Breath. Very Good! (Report) Reply

  • (11/6/2016 4:17:00 AM)

    The life a great experience to be experienced and reviewed frequently for a good voyage or journey to the oblivion. Wonderful poem. (Report) Reply

  • Brian Jani (5/13/2014 9:03:00 AM)

    Siddartha I enjoyed reading this one keep it up (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Saturday, September 1, 2012

Poem Edited: Sunday, September 17, 2017

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