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Your Attention God! ! !

Rating: 4.3

Hope you, You God, that you remember you made us Humans,
like all creatures and mammals!

We Humans so, yet, left the Path of Nature Some where,
we stored food and made ourselves Kings and went so rude!

We made many wars..., know not why, and killed,
Only had that witness of Blood that we spilled!

Yes then we found things for our way..,
we made something called Money,
yet we only have to live eating what you made from nature's way!

We made many a borders but can not stop any birds across,
we made Visas and papers as we do not see hearts and we miss all!

Damn we, we made rules and fails and made something(s) ,
and call it 'International day(s) of this and that,
He and She, that and this.. for all our Guilt(s) !


Save Us GOD, it is time for your attention,
we are just on the verge of Making in Quick,
'International day of Right Click and left Click'!

Oh No! ! Stop us GOD! !

we look at you God, for your attention! ! !


copyright © Siddartha Montik (Ramesh Kompella)

Saturday, December 17, 2016
Eating Poems: 52 / 500
Topic(s) of this poem: earth,god,goddess,war
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
I did not write these lines meaning anyone nor any Nations. I was only about the current way of life we humans are living even when we have very ways and means to live in Harmony with Nature and all Humans that share this Earth! I didn't mean to to make anyone Guilty in particular Nor any faction. Just it is the broad out look I tried I tried to express looking at the whole life (with such broad look)on Good Earth! I apologize if anyone personally feels bad, which definitely not my intention - Siddartha Montik
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COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Ruta Mohapatra 11 November 2017

' we made many a borders but cannot stop any birds across'- liked these lines. To be free like a bird is a dream.

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Osazee Dankaro 03 April 2017

As noted by the poet, humans are a creation of God. If that is the case, the flaws inherent in human beings could only have emanated from the source of humans. It should be noted that man was not created perfect, and not meant to be perfect. What other commentators have referred to as human problems, human insanity, how bad we have made out world, etc is probably the way God intended this world to be. God is all powerful and all knowing. It would therefore be safe to say that at the point of creating man, he knew the world will turn out to be like this, and he did not change it. All in all, I believe this poem needs more work. The logic is faulty and the religious undertones are too loud. As it is, it is more of a religious recitation than a poem.

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Tinashe Mupedzapasi 18 April 2017

We Humans so, yet, left the Path of Nature Some where...this where we humans have made our greatest mistake. God help us..Well written poem

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Siddartha Montik 30 April 2017

You Dear Poet struck at the Point, the Greatest Mistake we Humans did!

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Ryson Dsouza 27 January 2017

Thought Provoking Poem.....

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Luz Hanaii 25 January 2020

" We made many wars..., know not why, and killed, Only had that witness of Blood that we spilled! " I bet if only the Leaders of countries fought for their countries, wars would end. Thank you for sharing your thoughts.

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Uche Nwanze 08 August 2019

Well crafted and expressed... Mankind have strayed from the path. You poured out your heart into your ink

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Kyvin Nash 18 April 2019

Amen Siddartha, beautiful truth, yet to some its painful truth...so many people are in denial of the mess and sin we do every day, I remember the Bible mention that evil will increase, every time we think we getting wise, the more sinful we become, thanks for writing such a needed call.

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Julia Luber 20 February 2019

Does not seem to like the modern world at all.

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Srijita Mondal 15 February 2019

" We made many a borders but can not stop any birds across, we made Visas and papers for we do not see hearts as we all miss" Well penned poem

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