Aufie Zophy

Gold Star - 19,516 Points (18 October 1964)

Y/ Paradise - Poem by Aufie Zophy

Our world 'd be an amazing paradise
If we would just be always kind and wise
But all too often we cannot bother,
and then we're starting to hate each other
and in this way we surely jeopardise
our fabulous wonderful paradise

Bachok,9 June 2013
Aufie Zophy

Poet's Notes about The Poem

Inspired by a song from
the late Dutch artist Toon Hermans

Comments about Y/ Paradise by Aufie Zophy

  • (7/11/2013 1:00:00 AM)

    Yes, it starts from the some, even a humble abode is paradise! To others, a palace a prison. (Report) Reply

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  • Heather Wilkins (6/23/2013 11:38:00 AM)

    we send out our best thoughts to all the world. nice (Report) Reply

  • Ramesh Rai (6/20/2013 11:27:00 PM)

    best write. we the poets are trying to make it parsdise n o hope it wil not go invain. thnx for sharing (Report) Reply

  • Yasmin Khan (6/15/2013 8:04:00 AM)

    A message of kindness and compassion, if we practise the world would be a paradise like Eden above. (Report) Reply

  • (6/14/2013 12:09:00 AM)

    Love is the important factor of life, but it gets dismissed during pursuit of temporary pleasures..Good poem.. (Report) Reply

  • S.zaynab Kamoonpuri (6/13/2013 9:31:00 AM)

    Yeah d aggressive n d haters of mankind do turn dis world into hell. Lets pray d goodly ones increase as hoped for by yor super gr8 poem! And tnx 4 yor words on me poem. (Report) Reply

  • David Wood (6/13/2013 9:26:00 AM)

    So very true Hans. A good poem, I like it (Report) Reply

  • (6/13/2013 6:35:00 AM)

    Well penned, and correct, thanks for sharing. (Report) Reply

  • Unwritten Soul (6/10/2013 5:34:00 AM)

    Ethereal to live here as paradise, but great to try...and it never wrong to do....Paradise on earth is can be here when hearts of people be the stars that shine love and its magical beat to unify all livings and souls as one body_Soul (Report) Reply

  • Valerie Dohren (6/9/2013 9:58:00 AM)

    We are a long way from Paradise, a very long way, ..... Good one Aufie. (Report) Reply

  • Captain Cur (6/9/2013 9:43:00 AM)

    Nice straightforward write of what it will take
    to get rid of hate and live in paradise. But as
    you say we do not bother to take the time,
    hence I agree, will lead to our demise.
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Poem Submitted: Saturday, June 8, 2013

Poem Edited: Wednesday, July 31, 2013

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