An Untold Love Poem by Musfiq us shaleheen

An Untold Love

Rating: 4.8


Vitreous shinning of moon,
In the springtime mother's pique
A train carried me from dark to light,
A rose bud bloomed-

I have grasped roses
And devotion songs together,
Hands with my dreamed darling boon,
A dream decided real,
Never forgotten,
Meaning of love as moonlit,
Learned from thy

Now onward-I see
Narrow uneven path,
Aye passionate pain stressed,
Thee roses faded and wither,
In a missing melancholy song-

On a full moon I bide on a boat for thy
Until ache twilight horizon-
Behind apart from time-
A mature pensive ripened,
An abstract passion craved for romance

Oh! It's beyond the wording,
Oh! My darling-
Oh! I forever behold thy
Oh! ho! yet an untold love
I have felt! !

@Musfiq us shaleheen,
30th Decmber,2012

Sunday, December 30, 2012
Topic(s) of this poem: love
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
On a full moon I bide on a boat for thy
Until ache twilight horizon-
Behind apart from time-
A mature pensive ripened,
An abstract passion craved for romance
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Jahan Zeb 04 January 2013

That is one lovely piece dear. I liked the way you used your words. imaginative and poetic. Loved the flow of the poem and sweet sounds. Very well done

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Vivek Tiwari 03 January 2013

good piece of romantic poetry well expressed in superb imagery. Wish may your untold love have a louder and passionate echo to the silent ears of your love to make her know your intense love.

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Sallam Yassin 31 December 2012

Romantic love hidden in your heart but it shine in every word of u thanks

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Xelam Kan™ 31 December 2012

images are crafted well but lack cohesion...... poem must be well constructed... there must be a logical sequence among scene, lines and even feelings, no doubt you did it well but my humble wit expected more from your genius..... good effort.....keep penning and ponder, tnx dear

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Sayeed Abubakar 31 December 2012

Love is real. Your poem is real. Go on.

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Akhtar Jawad 15 September 2014

On a full moon I bide on a boat for thy Until ache twilight horizon- Behind apart from time- A mature pensive ripened, An abstract passion craved for romance Truly beautiful, a nice lovely poem, I have no alternate but to rate it 10 and include in my favorite poems.

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Saiom Shriver 24 April 2013

A train carried me from dark to light, can be compared to our teachers and parents who carry us back to Allah Your poem has great intensity

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Indranil Bhaduri 10 January 2013

Romance.... I feel this is one of the best pieces I have read.

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Nader Baheri 06 January 2013

so romantically piece of art. now i think this love is told it is no more else untold. best ~nb .

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Jaya Mishra 04 January 2013

So true.... This is indeed an abstract poem craved for romance. The way you have put your words is so beautiful that it makes me feel beautiful about love.... I loved this.... I actually did...! !

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