Even though I love you there's something I can't contain
This feeling of utter disappointment and of some undying pain
It doesn't seem to go away no matter how hard I think it's not
Because in this web of love it kinda seems like I'm caught
Now don't get me wrong I believe we still can be together
But the spark is kind of dying like the eye of stormy weather
I know there's some steps necessary before we can express affection
Because my thinking of our possible future seems to be my only protection
I don't know the reasons oral words just doesn't seem to read right
I guess the only way to let you hear how I feel is ironically to write
I wanna kiss you and I miss you but maybe us can never be
And only due to haters filling my mind with some fermented chi
Maybe I'm just trippin' or constantly movin like a dancer
I really hope we can be together so now I really need an answer.
*Virus 12 - Shy*
Copyright 12/19/08 ©® Corey Threet
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This poem is beautiful i can feel the emotion in it. your a really good writer i love how you show emotions so easily with your writing its effortless it seems. :)
my favorite lines....'I know there's some steps necessary before we can express affection Because my thinking of our possible future seems to be my only protection I don’t know the reasons oral words just doesn’t seem to read right I guess the only way to let you hear how I feel is ironically to write I wanna kiss you and I miss you but maybe us can never be' i dont want to be like everyone and just say these are my favorite lines but....this truly is a loving poem. I really feel the emotions of love and pain and so much more personally you displayed love and pursuing a love one and not lettling go in a good way putting yourself out there....truly i respect this
Maybe I’m just tripping or constantly movin like a dancer I really hope we can be together so now I really need an answer. Really beautiful expression. Nicely penned. Deserves 10+++++
I know there's some steps necessary before we can express affection Because my thinking of our possible future seems to be my only protection I don’t know the reasons oral words just doesn’t seem to read right I guess the only way to let you hear how I feel is ironically to write These lines are... amazing. I love them so much. Plus beautiful poem.
Very clear expression of your tender sentiments, and boldly so, beautifully portrayed! I loved your poem, you have a great potential! And let me tell you Love is not dependence as often lover say, ' I can't love without him/her'. This is incorrect. Love is a conscious choice of independent(and not dependent- slaves) two individual to live together and enjoy the independence.Thanks.
Your analogies are great! And the emotion of dying love is really captured here
Wow! This really evokes feelings of a love slipping a way while all one can do is helplessly watch.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
You are developing you own style. This one reads smoothly and presents your case in a noteworthy way. You are good at rhyming and coming up with something worthwhile to say.