Five Liner- Fear Poem by Valsa George

Five Liner- Fear

Rating: 5.0


Stranded in the caverns of darkness
I am convulsed with fears
And confounded by delusions
Apparitions enter unlocking the doors
With razor sharp canine teeth gnawing into my neck

Five Liner- Fear
Sunday, March 6, 2016
Topic(s) of this poem: fear
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Bri Edwards 06 March 2016

no shivers down my spine. of course i'm 'spineless'! i think of claws clawing and teeth gnawing. but i shall grant poetic license..................this time! i love the photo of valsa in her younger days, but i think it is just a shadow of her husband approaching. hee-hee. bri ;)

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Valsa George 08 March 2016

Enjoyed your comment Bri and the humour of it! Thanks for the correction! Yes, teeth gnaw and nails claw. I shall make the correction now itself! No body can beat you in your observation!

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Nosheen Irfan 07 March 2016

Brilliant. Fear described in wonderful imagery. Apparitions enter unlocking the door...wow. Very sensory images to make fear palpable. A sure 10.

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Dimitrios Galanis 07 March 2016

A mere coincidence.Last night I had a terrible dream.When waked up I did not know if I was a human being, or who I was.I discovered I could hardly breathe through the nose and the mouth was closed...Your poem paints the scene I was in.

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Souren Mondal 08 March 2016

You have really hit the bull's eye with this one.. The best part of this poem is the short length of it.. It makes the idea very clear.. A beautiful take on fear Valsa ma'am.. Thank you.. : -)

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Mj Lemon 02 July 2019

Incredible verse, Valsa. Indeed, fear works in a way that makes one feel utterly claustrophobic. Fear is indeed a stalker. This goes to myfavourites.

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Robert Murray Smith 10 July 2018

Fear has screams written on its face.+++10

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Kumarmani Mahakul 12 May 2018

Fear in mind creates unusual delusion that appears to mind as apparitions. You have so nicely and astuty inscribed this theme with a attractive beginning like..... Stranded in the caverns of darkness I am convulsed with fears... A brilliant poem in concise.

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Akhtar Jawad 11 May 2018

Most of the fears are evil creation of our own minds. Heart may help us to remove the fear.

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Chinedu Dike 30 December 2017

The piece is a witty reflection on a bunch of sinister shadows without substance - that's fear. An insightful poem, very realistic descriptions. Thanks for sharing Valsa..

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