I caught a glimpse of you today
Walking down my street
Skateboard under your arm
Long blond hair flopping over your eyes
And those baggy skater boy pants.
My breath caught in my throat
My heart stumbled over its beat
When I suddenly realized that
It couldn't be you after all.
First because you are no longer here
You are gone
Senselessly murdered for
A grand total of two thousand dollars
And a few grams of cocaine.
The second reason I remembered
That it couldn't be you
Was because when you were so brutally
Taken from this world
You were no longer that teenaged
Baggy jeaned skater boy
But a man of twenty eight
A man who maybe hadn't
Necessarily made the correct
Choices in life
But certainly didn't deserve to
Have your life taken in such a
Horrific and despicable manner
No person deserves that.
Despite the choices you chose
And the lifestyle you lived
The man I knew
Still had the innocent heart
Of that young skater boy
You showed me the kind side
Of your personality
Your sweetness and caring
Your love of life itself.
Although you have been gone
Many years now
I still think of you often
Your memory will
Forever remain within me.
I caught a glimpse of you today
Or so I thought......
i'm sorry to hear about your friend, i can relate to such a situation and it's difficult to try and get through such a thing which is why i picked up writing poems.it helps to release all the pain in writing.good poes and tribute to your friend
It is so true, Colleen, some of us make wrong choices, but it does not make them bad people. All have a soft spot, somewhere deep inside a good heart. I think that each of us have both sides in us. If one is brutally murdered, it is sad, no matter what were the circumstances. I like the poem very much, it is truly touching.
Another sad, but all too familiar a story - it happens too often these days. Good write Colleen.
I am almost never speechless, your poem has rendered speechless now. This is without a doubt one of the most powerful poems I have ever read, highlighting the atrocities of daily life and using emotive language to set the tone, mood and atmosphere in the poem. Excellent and powerful poem. Take a bow Colleen, amazing! ! ! ! ! !
Its always nice to remember—memories keep us in connection with ourselves. Nice poem – keep writing.
It's interesting how the mind can play tricks. And yet, you've turned that mindful trick into a mindful poem. A sad heart felt poem. A poem that comes from your heart and soul. Empathy and vivid imagery. Great ingredients for masterful poetry. Congrats on yet another excellent write.
This is more like a story rather than poetry. I it missing some required elements for poetry. There's pros poetry but, at least it should have a rhythm or meter. It can be a great short story though. Hope you don't mind my comment since I usually like your work. Perhaps you can review it, it doesn't have to rhyme but what about a beat? That would make it more enjoyable.
You have mastered the art of story telling poetic form. I really felt carried away by your feeling and felt gloomy for the you remembered. You are great writer poet. My favorite lines of poems runs below: Despite the choices you chose And the lifestyle you lived The man I knew Still had the innocent heart Of that young skater boy You showed me the kind side Of your personality Your sweetness and caring Your love of life itself.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Kept my attention. It's really sad to lose someone, like this! But your poem captured the sadness and void caused by his death in a manner that I was almost on the verge of crying! May you be blessed with strength. Keep writing.