Senryu- My Dreams Poem by Valsa George

Senryu- My Dreams

Rating: 4.9


My heart, ripped open
Incensed dreams spiralled around
Floating in thin air

Thursday, April 28, 2016
Topic(s) of this poem: senryu
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Amitava Sur 21 May 2016

A lovely state of mind is portrayed here in those few lines, very nice. After a long spell arrived here and posted few poems

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Loke Kok Yee 10 May 2016

Never knew where dreams come from till now Thanks Valsa-10

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Savita Tyagi 03 May 2016

Dream are so vivid some time. They express our emotions in strange ways but your poetic expressions are most beautiful.

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Kumarmani Mahakul 29 April 2016

Floating in the air I judge upon dreams and find heart ripped upon. Very interesting poem shared on really. Finely drafted and shared...10

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Dr Dillip K Swain 07 November 2021

A beautiful little poem dear madam! Loved reading it.....top score! !

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Susan Williams 29 August 2016

Valsa! ! ! You rule over the Art of Brevity! ! ! My heart, ripped open Incensed dreams spiralled around Floating in thin air - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Just three lines yet I have been mulling over these words for a half an hour. My thoughts are centered on that one word- -Incensed- - I see a play on words here that is very subtle. When I first read it, I defined incensed as angry, offended, enraged and having the sense of having just been incited, these feelings spiraled around and around in confusion and increasing rage and in blind fury..... this certainly fit in with the first line wherein the heart had been brutally ripped open and dreams were destroyed, damaged, ripped from stem to stern...... yet I could not fit these images with line 3. Floating? Thin air? Then I reread and reread. Ah-ha, I see Valsa is a subtle, clever, writer..... incensed as in burning incense bringing aromas spiraling up to float mysteriously in thin air almost as unsubstantial as the dreams that our hearts yearn into our sleep. This is such a lovely lovely write, Valsa. A million tens! ! ! ! !

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Valsa George 30 August 2016

Susan.... I feel awed by this glowing comment....! Shall I accept it with grace.... I don't know! ! Your comments are a class.... not my poems! However I feel, I have not enough words to thank you!

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Akhtar Jawad 10 August 2016

A nice senryu on dreams, ....................................................

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Edward Kofi Louis 08 August 2016

Going into another realm with the muse of your dream. Thanks for sharing.

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Queeny Gona 16 June 2016

For reasons known and unknown men dream a lot. Theories are being developed since ages to interpret dreams yet the actual reason is still a puzzle. Me and my hubby had a very strange dream on 15th May,2016 that to similar dream and at the same time that we both awoke instantly to comfort each other. May you please leave your valuable comments on 15th May,2016 dear mam!

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