Trips Of The Mind Poem by Scarlett Treat

Trips Of The Mind

Rating: 3.1

In my mind trips, I traveled
The shape of your body at least
A thousand times, until I knew
Each contour,
Each curve, each line.

In my heart's journey, I roamed
As freely as the wind blows,
Covering the surface of you,
Blowing into each crack and crevice
Until I became you.

Chuck Audette 27 January 2006

I really like this one! The last two stanza is beautiful. -chuck

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Mary Nagy 27 January 2006

oooh, the blowing into each crack and crevice until I became you........I love that! I am enjoying your work very much Linda! Very nice. Sincerely, Mary

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Linda Hepner 01 February 2006

Loved this. The loved one as landscape. And your powerful mind. Admiringly, Linda

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Cj Heck 01 February 2006

Lovely and sensual. I enjoyed this very much. Yes, you are a true romantic. My warmest regards, CJ

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Tara Crown 18 February 2006

Beautiful description of what the imagination can do with the objects of our affection...I, too, love the analogy of the body/landscape...I was breezing with the wind through the gorgeous crevices; o)

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Joy Vanderhelm 23 March 2007

I got to the end and wished there was more to it. A surprise for the mental senses. Great work.

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Gregory Gunn 09 June 2006

Linda, you have created a lovely little charmer. Sincerely, Greg

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Esther Leclerc 05 April 2006

Wonderfully sensual meditation... I love the feel of: 'In my heart's journey, I roamed/As freely as the wind blows...'

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Julia Klimenova 28 March 2006

The unity of two becoming one, beautifully described. A very nice poem, Linda. Julia

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Courtney Elmlinger 18 February 2006

Linda~ This poem is so sensual and calming. My favorite part is, “Blowing into each crack and crevice Until I became you.” The imagery here is so beautiful and almost mystifying. Nicely done! :) ~Courtney

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