Ahmad Shiddiqi

Un Castillo En El Cielo

Desperte
No temprano
Vi

Mosquito
Pico
Sangre en la barbilla

Sobre la pared
Arana
Vuelve atras

Espejo
En frente de
Chasquido

Hervi
Agua del pozo
Burbujo

Poem Submitted: Friday, May 1, 2009

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  • Edgar John Jackson (5/14/2010 5:41:00 PM)

    Well it is so different as we used to write in Spanish but it is good. Keep writing.... :)

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  • Dragon Wizard (10/16/2009 8:24:00 AM)

    Una estructura tipo haiku múltiple en Español.
    Interesante planteamiento. Sigue trabajando!
    Saludos,
    Dragon Wizard

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  • L.P. Alexanders (9/16/2009 11:31:00 PM)

    buen poema amigo poeta, me gustó mucho las imagenes que proyecta el poema
    keep at the good work

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  • Ana Zaldivar (9/16/2009 9:05:00 PM)

    nice simple but with a lot of feeling :)

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  • Elaine Oxamendi Vicet (5/3/2009 10:45:00 AM)

    The Castle in the Sky...Un tragico castillo en el cielo, un lugar donde no quisiera encontrarme.
    El poema parece enmascarar la triste realida de la vida. El espejo refleja lo que quieres ver- en el trasfondo; quebrantado!
    An interesting write.

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  • Allemagne RoßmannAllemagne Roßmann (5/3/2009 9:11:00 AM)

    Hermosamente y exquisitamente escrito....10

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  • Eyan Desir (5/2/2009 8:46:00 PM)

    me no compreheno.........................

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  • Amy (5/2/2009 3:48:00 PM)

    genial! me encanta la poema

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  • Juan Carlos Abeti (5/2/2009 1:10:00 PM)

    The powm is ok good i should say, but idid not get the tiltle with the poem itself

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  • Ency BearisEncy Bearis (5/2/2009 8:19:00 AM)

    esta poema con escribir muy bien..gracias

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  • Sandra MartyresSandra Martyres (5/2/2009 7:49:00 AM)

    Sorry Ahmad...I do not know Spanish either...as Eyan says an English version would be helpful

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  • Maria Barbara Korynt (5/2/2009 7:43:00 AM)

    Briefly and concisely writing - you wrote the cool poem. I like it.
    Greetings. :) Maria Barbara Korynt

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  • Eyan Desir (5/2/2009 4:44:00 AM)

    sorry I dont know
    spanish
    you should
    put the poem in english
    also thanks

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  • Lee Crowell (5/1/2009 7:33:00 PM)

    Ahmad, it's impressive that you're multilingual, but do you realize that many of us are not?

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  • rago rago (5/1/2009 7:15:00 PM)

    Please forgive me I do not know the language........ Yet I understand these pertains to something related to mosquito from the comments. Kindly translate it to English so that I can share you the moments of happiness.

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  • Louis RamsLouis Rams (5/1/2009 6:57:00 PM)

    ESTA POEMA ES FUERTE!

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  • Joseph Poewhit (5/1/2009 6:47:00 PM)

    Mosquito's are pesty in the summer - they bite

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  • Ruerd Visser (5/1/2009 6:44:00 PM)

    You live in a poetic world my friend,
    begotten we all are with your verses from all over the world.
    It´s allmost like being on a holliday to another country.
    You are truly blessed.

    By the way i´d be honored if you read and comment
    on the will of the heaven on page 2.

    Divine greetings from Friesland

    Boomfriend Ruerd

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  • Christina Phan (5/1/2009 5:22:00 PM)

    great one
    cool
    10+

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  • Ahmad ShiddiqiAhmad Shiddiqi (5/1/2009 4:31:00 PM)

    Hello friends, this is the English translation.

    'Castle In The Sky'

    I woke up
    Not early
    I saw

    Mosquito
    Chewed
    Chin’s blood

    On wall
    Spider
    Go backward

    Mirror
    In front of
    Clinked

    I boiled
    Well’s water
    Chatered

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