Tareq Jalabi

Rookie (20\11\1988 / Russian Federation)

Unbreakable Love - Poem by Tareq Jalabi

People`s words cannot
break us apart
they separated our bodies
but not our heart
love does not whither
but glows like art
because of their jealousy
they made me depart
however, i am with you
and of me every part
***
don`t give up on me now
please, stay about
keeping living without you
i seriously doubt
don`t stay in paradise
and leave me out
don`t listen to them
and let us go out


Comments about Unbreakable Love by Tareq Jalabi

  • (5/25/2009 9:29:00 PM)


    Good write, Blue Eyes...natural rhyming with sweet rhythm inside...well formatted lines...thanks...10 (Report) Reply

    0 person liked.
    0 person did not like.
  • (2/8/2009 9:52:00 PM)


    This is a sweet poem. The first stanza was especially good. The only poor part
    was the last line. The ending of the poem. Your poem had good rhythm and rhyme, but the last line was a bit weak. Sort of so so. Perhaps, there may
    have been a better line, but I can't think of one myself. I would keep trying though
    if I were you. Still, a beautiful poem.

    GW62
    (Report) Reply

  • Maia Padua (1/31/2009 6:48:00 AM)


    wonderful words...beautifully thoughts in it....
    endless love....true love...great love
    doesnt wither even though long drought of will come
    10+++
    (Report) Reply

  • (12/27/2008 11:52:00 PM)


    This poem has a really strong meaning. I love the way you say 'they separated our bodies but not our heart'. Well done! Karin Anderson (Report) Reply

  • (8/26/2008 4:48:00 AM)


    i so love this poem it shows real love that can never be broken......i was so touched by it........thanks a lot for sharing (Report) Reply

  • (7/3/2008 12:11:00 PM)


    wow i love it! so true i love it lol. thx 4 sharing. (Report) Reply

  • Bethany Buhl (6/16/2008 5:26:00 PM)


    I find it funny how you can be 1,000 miles away from someone and still love them, but anyways I absolutely love this poem. (Report) Reply

  • (6/14/2008 11:38:00 AM)


    very well done. i like it. its awesome. keep up the good work. (Report) Reply

  • (6/13/2008 2:40:00 AM)


    LET US GO OUT..and find a part..to live with a heart..where nothing can make it in two 'part'...................fantasticcccccccccc. (Report) Reply

Read all 9 comments »



Read this poem in other languages

This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.

I would like to translate this poem »

word flags

What do you think this poem is about?



Poem Submitted: Tuesday, June 10, 2008

Poem Edited: Saturday, June 14, 2008


[Report Error]