Ahmad Shiddiqi

Rookie - 6 Points (March 7,1974 / Semarang, Central Java, Indonesia)

Visibly - Poem by Ahmad Shiddiqi

(dedicated to Mr.Leslie Howard, a great pianist)

The hats
The dogs
The trees
The boats
The ladies

The monkey
The children
The umbrellas
The gentlemen
The social classes

miniature dots
new language
variation< br>emotion

int ensity

c alm

luminous hues
directed upwards
pointing downwards
predominance of warmth

The grass
The water
The faces
The clothes
The activities

The park
The island
The suburb
The landscape
The public garden

(inspired by Seurat's Un dimanche après-midi à l'Île de la Grande Jatte)

Comments about Visibly by Ahmad Shiddiqi

  • (1/7/2009 8:54:00 AM)

    A GREAT PIECE OF PROSE! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! (Report) Reply

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  • (12/30/2008 7:59:00 AM)

    Very interesting selection of words! (Report) Reply

  • Sebastine Humaemo (12/30/2008 4:19:00 AM)

    nice selection of words......quite different and interesting....thanks for sharing....sebastine... (Report) Reply

  • Maia Padua (12/27/2008 2:27:00 AM)

    very unique piece from a unique you....brilliantly done and successfully put me to read and absorb your words...and savor the meaning of your piece as a whole...its wonderful....it seems I'm in the most beautiful place where everything is there....just like music...everything is there...all the feelings.....10+++++
    more power....maia
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  • (12/26/2008 4:54:00 AM)

    Very nice work, I enjoyed this format and your selection of vocabulary. i like the form you have wrote in making it different and unique :)

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  • (12/21/2008 10:06:00 AM)

    All these..has to be visible, indeed...

    Wonderful poem of deep thought...

    Thanks for sharing..A 10++!
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  • (12/21/2008 2:09:00 AM)

    you've found different nouns in writing your poem, amazing..
    really great work
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  • (12/20/2008 3:44:00 AM)

    You have enumerated different arts of nature...

    Hmm...a different one! ! !
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  • (12/19/2008 7:40:00 AM)

    Very Awesome and well expressed.
    Thanks for sharing

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  • Fay Slimm (12/19/2008 3:46:00 AM)

    A novel way of presentation Ahmad - and it certainly catches the eye as would the bouncing notes of the music - it is a quite unique innovation to write after the musical experience and you cleverly represent what you feel in this and your other work - - a top mark from me...... Fay. (Report) Reply

  • (12/19/2008 12:29:00 AM)

    visibly well expressed! (Report) Reply

  • (12/19/2008 12:18:00 AM)

    Superb crafting is visibly great! (Report) Reply

  • Kassem Oude (12/19/2008 12:06:00 AM)

    I think all those being you mentioned are delirious by the pianist performance, he should be wonderful player. Wonderful piece. (Report) Reply

  • (12/19/2008 12:03:00 AM)

    It's a simple, yet contains a beautiful meanings..
    Well penned...
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  • (12/18/2008 10:53:00 PM)

    Don't bend-fold-spindle-mutilate (Report) Reply

  • (12/18/2008 10:06:00 PM)

    You painted the poem with stroke of colorful words.
    Good Work......................
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  • (12/18/2008 10:00:00 PM)

    is it about a musical score or a painting? (Report) Reply

  • (12/18/2008 8:46:00 PM)

    Nice writing and epressive words used. (Report) Reply

  • (12/18/2008 8:12:00 PM)

    quite interesting, well done! (Report) Reply

  • (12/18/2008 7:41:00 PM)

    Love the pattern its nice and nice wording...

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, December 18, 2008