Naseer Ahmed Nasir

A Song Before Victorious Enemy

Some flowers here are mine
Write these on the trees

Some dreams here are mine
Write these on the walls

Some songs here are mine
Write these on the swords

Some people here are mine
Write them also on the gallows.

(1985, Translated by Dr. Amjad Parvez)

Poem Submitted: Saturday, March 14, 2009
Poem Edited: Tuesday, August 4, 2009

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  • Bob Eichen (6/30/2009 7:29:00 PM)

    some thoughts now are mine
    write them on my tombstone
    great poem!

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  • Tamara Hanaring A Thought Mate (5/31/2009 12:46:00 AM)

    a beautifuland meaningful poem and there on that sword the names of whom we love will be written on that trees our flower will grow... and in that sword which will defeat the enemy who try to scare our little ones, who try to kill our dreams with that sword we will give them what they brought...10++++

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  • Sherrie Tappenden (4/23/2009 1:15:00 AM)

    Cuts very deep into the heart. To be asking with such gentleness. To entreat your enemies to leave some semblance of your life after defeat. This is an amazing poem. Sherrie

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  • Allemagne RoßmannAllemagne Roßmann (4/11/2009 9:59:00 AM)

    From my Punjabi tashan-
    Jung-azaadi ki nishan is rangda
    Yeh mohabbatandi firaq, yeh jungez naam aur ilzaam hi sau rabdi mangda
    A very wonderful chant of
    triumphant self.A 10 from me.

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  • Umbelina Linhares Pimenta Frota Bastos (3/30/2009 7:55:00 PM)

    Fantastic! A true shout for the peace.Let's make of the flowers our weapons. Congratulations.

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  • Mark NwagwuMark Nwagwu (3/28/2009 6:27:00 AM)

    victorious enemy! you move from trees, flowers in hand; run; stopped by walls; swords unsheathed; gallows your embrace; blood of the inocent, flows in my vines, in the garden of martyrs.

    this pained me a lot; great write, Nasser

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  • Patricia Gale (3/27/2009 4:35:00 PM)

    A proper title for the piece!

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  • Rajaram RamachandranRajaram Ramachandran (3/27/2009 10:17:00 AM)

    It is a pathetic song of a defeated person before victorius enemy.

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  • Nicholas Spandrel [Enjoys Writing Poetry] (3/27/2009 9:29:00 AM)

    amazing work of art.
    10/10

    Nicholas Spandrel

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  • Anjali Sinha (3/26/2009 11:06:00 PM)

    extremely nice --beautifully penned
    -10
    anjali

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  • Mitchell Glasbrenner (3/26/2009 12:46:00 PM)

    thats is fary good?
    you can send it my my poehunter?

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  • %*-Young Song-*% (3/26/2009 8:20:00 AM)

    That was very good. It sort of gave me chill bumps. I give you Kudos!

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  • Sally Plumb (3/25/2009 11:08:00 AM)

    Sharp! I think this one is good.

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  • Tim Honeycutt (3/24/2009 7:36:00 AM)

    simple poem and very good

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  • Eyan Desir (3/24/2009 6:34:00 AM)

    interestin
    fun to readin
    well said

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  • Vinod KumarVinod Kumar (3/24/2009 1:46:00 AM)

    A good refreshment of all minds, and to the rememberence of almighty, each and every desires are blessfully allowed for each moments. thanks for sharing,10+

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  • Chandrashekar A Posy PoetChandrashekar A Posy Poet (3/24/2009 12:03:00 AM)

    Thought provoking and insightful! ! !

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  • Lakshmi Venkataraman (3/23/2009 11:37:00 PM)

    truly inspiring! ! !
    'Some people here are mine
    Write them also on the gallows.'
    those lines! ! ! ! ! really touched my heart! ! ! !

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  • Irene Clark-hogg (3/23/2009 10:26:00 PM)

    I have read these words many times.
    With very few words you have evoked great feelings, my friend.

    I have only one question.
    Is there ever a true victor in war, surely every-one loses.
    Irene

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  • Lalay Allan (3/23/2009 10:07:00 AM)

    Simple words used but with very deep thoughts that penetrates into one's conscience. Courageous words to dedicate a victorious enemy creating a very sad but comforting song. War is a shared responsiblity, shared aspirations, and shared consequences, of the contending groups. This is a powerful political poem that has very strong messages. This is really an excellent work!

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